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Bars and Stars

There are streetlights that stand like beacons
As they light the strangers way back home
Shining on pavements slick with raindrops
Reminding so many they're all alone
And the storefronts all neon frosted
Creating pools of coloured delights
Beckoning with their chrome and promise
Of better times and cozy nights

There are sidewalks with chalky pictures
As the rain washes them away
And the colours swirl in silence
No one recalls what they displayed

While across the intersection
The traffic lights play out their coloured themes
A symphony of life that always passing
A procession of cars an endless stream
And in all this strange migration
People wonder who the hell they are
They can't count the missing moments
By separating all the bars and stars

For no matter how many drink there
Seeking solace in the smoky gloom
Lighting cigarettes with soggy matches
And reminiscing then forgetting all too soon
It's a tide that's overpowering
Sweeping everything away
In beery tears it's a sad reminder
That they have to get through another day

So raise your glasses and toast to heaven
Pray to whatever you may find
For the bars like stars are havens
For the lost and those left far behind

And the reasons far outnumber the causes
You can only stretch yourself so far
In this world of broken pauses
Filled with endless bars and stars...

Yes! the reasons far outnumber the causes
You can only stretch yourself so far
In this world of broken pauses
Filled with endless bars and stars...




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AP Name: m y r i a d - d a r k

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  • second-born
    March 31

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    wow...the fine rhythm just swept me away...it's like cradling me...and the whole setting of the piece just gave me goosebumps...such an amazing piece!!!


  • Amera gold member
    July 14, 2007

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    This is a well composed piece and worthy to be in this contest. Good luck in the judging.

    Love,
    Amera ♥


  • Twilight4Eternity
    May 8, 2007

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    your placement of words is amazing, and it creates such a great flow. This kept me interested and I truly enjoyed reading it.


  • aliceramone
    May 8, 2007

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    a really good write with excellent rhythm and rhyme...would make a great song...the reasons far out number the causes...an excellent line...I did see one mis...cosy...cozy...minor stuff ...otherwise the content is solid...thanks for entering and good luck in the contest


  • heygoo
    May 8, 2007

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    Some really lovely imagery here. "Shining on pavements slick with raindrops" "Seeking solice in the smoky gloom
    Lighting cigarettes with soggy matches
    And reminiscing then forgetting all too soon" You have done a great job with this piece. So vivid a picture your words display.

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