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Towards a theory of poetry

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Another mesh in the web
a wave in an innocent sieve,
adrift on the endless sea.

“Dadburned humans.”
the old Elephant thought
crashing through the village
that wasn’t there last week;
“Always scattering things about.”

How was it then to be noir
esquire,
expressed
to be espoused of the noble bard;
possessed,

Perhaps.

2.

“It might be something else,”
he thought secretly enjoying
the havoc he produced
as the dust rose in the
once quiet village.

It is a sacred trust
this truth about the lie,
the old elephant
sauntering off into the
sunset his mind reflecting
on something else altogether.
“What would you like to know of the Gods”
Plato’s father said to his son.
the clatter of War being readied
out side the sunny room.

A tired old elephant,
just might
rest up against a tree
when he wants a nap.

3.

How would you like it to be
just to be green in the Panther’s dream,
a sacred trust to be sure,
count to three,
“honestly upon my word”
said the young elephant,
to the old,
in passing upon the forest path.

 A common occurrence that harms no-one,
a vast terrascape of noxious gas.
Like allison, his aim was true,
and the fig tree rotted.

Such winds as bent the tops of trees,
bothered him not at all
as death was the law of the land.

Young elephants are often rude;
a prince they say is entitled to make errors.

 

 

 

Author notes

The roaring of Lions,
The howling of Wolves,
The raging of the Stormy Sea...

Are portions of eternity
to great for the eye
of man.
-William Blake

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  • cvillelisa
    March 18, 2008
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  • Lugh
    May 24, 2007
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    I will be closing this contest tomorrow, and as I cannot interpret this poem beyond an intensly basic level, I will be forced to not give you a trophy... I think that this poem is very good, but I cannot judge it if i cannot understand it! could you please offer me a little help, as i wouldn't like to give you nothing just because I can't work out what you mean! You have till tommorow!

  • Lugh
    May 22, 2007
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    wow, sorry about this... i enjoyed the poem, but find it a bit hard to grasp! please let me know a little about the images that you are using! I would like you to do well in this competition, but can't make a judgement at the mo, due to my own failings. Thank


  • maria
    May 16, 2007

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    "To see a world in a grain of sand,
    And a heaven in a wild flower,
    Hold infinity in the palm of your hand,
    And eternity in an hour."

    William Blake

    I love reading Blake.

    I am continously making mistakes - in each eternity.
    Does that make me a princess?


    Maria


  • passionvine
    May 9, 2007

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    Plum Perfect Pome

    Dayyam. I been a-studyin this here pome fer a spell and I reckon it be a metaphor.

    Teacher: “L’il Jimmy what’s a metaphor?

    L’il Jimmy: Why shoot, Teach, it’s for to graze sheep in.

    I heard told there be some what think that Wild Billy Blake be touched. I reckon same parcel of folk would claim the same bout ussens.


    I don’t take it no never mind.

    I like this here Elephant – “dadburned humans” heh heh heh – fer shore.

    Them what uses that citified slang like “noir” and “esquire” oughts to get their village tromped far as I’m concerned.

    Plato? Puh. Law, he hain’t got more sense then a skint cat on a slag heap. Folk like Plato is plum crazy and gets everyone all hetted up and fixin to feud and fight over stuff and nothin.’ I cain’t say as I care much for Plato.

    You? You I like a whole mess of a lot. You is a Poet – with a capital P.

    Young elephants, waall fartin’ and fussin’ in all – I reckon all what you done said would put a mighty sigh into a fig tree – but any dern fool know a fig tree’ll keel right over and die iffen you don’t bury hit to winter times.

    Hit be a sacred trust. This here lie. I been a-fixin to write me a pome, but I got this her notion that pomes gots nothing to do with words – and it be clean nigh unto impossible to writes without words.

    You got her down, Driver – I tip my hat to you.

    This here pome is just plum perfect – I love you and Wild Billy – and I don’t give a tinker’s damn what any other fool says.

    You write more.

    Peace, brother.


  • ArtFullyMe gold member
    May 8, 2007
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    nicely done....


  • AJ Morelli gold member
    May 8, 2007
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    Cool...



  • The Bear
    May 8, 2007

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    They went to sea in a sieve they did, in a sieve they went to sea, and after being becalmed for a few hundred years, they were blown towards the poet's gate by the huge fart of the old elephant.
    It is the second very Blake thing I have read in as many days. Is it Blake week?


  • NurseChilly gold member
    May 8, 2007

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    even quoting Elvis Costello now... "every day I write the book"

    golly..........

    of course I'll be back


    this needs to have its ears pricked

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