Children gather round the fire
And you shall hear a tale,
Of two great armies clashing swords
And which one would prevail.
The War was fought so long ago
Its all but been forgot
But i recall as clear as day
The battle I saw fought....
For War is a terrible thing, my son,
The price of honor's high
But young men rarely think such things
When they hear the battle's cry
Two great armies facing off
Each with a point to prove
One side, The Knights of Cauldron's Black
Against The Bloody Rouge
Both armies had marched through the night
Till face to face they'd come
Then both armies had to wait
For the rising of the sun
For War is a terrible thing, my son,
The price of honor's high
But young men rarely think such things
When they hear the battle's cry
In a skillful Knight called Lucien
The Rouge did place their trust
He claimed he knew they would not fail
Because their cause was just
Shiaten led the Cauldron Black
He was both strong and brave
On a banner flew his motto
"Victory or the Grave"
For War is a terrible thing, my son,
The price of honor's high
But young men rarely think such things
When they hear the battle's cry
Then the Knights of the Bloody Rouge
Faced the Knights of the Cauldron Black
Once the battle had begun
There'd be no turning back
The Sun came up, the war began
They fought with all their might
Both armies battled through that day
And well into the night
For War is a terrible thing, my son,
The price of honor's high
But young men rarely think such things
When they hear the battle's cry
In the morn, the sun arose
And one thing became plain
Though two great armies started out
Just two men did remain
Lucien and Shiaten
Had both remained alive
And they were fighting valiantly
Just trying to survive
For War is a terrible thing, my son,
The price of honor's high
But young men rarely think such things
When they hear the battle's cry
Though both men had fought fiercely
One man had to win
Lucien swung, and then struck off
The Head of Shiaten
Then Lucien cast aside his sword
And breathed his final breath
On the field next to his foe
He died a Hero's death
For glory's road is rocky
The path is stained blood red
but fame and fortune matter not
When the Victor ends up dead!!
Author notes
Its an Epic Ballad.
A contest entry
- Rounds with AngieMarie. ROUND ONE!! PREWRITES! All welcome!!! by Angierie.
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Comments
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hi
I like this poem I tend to lose interset in long writting but I had my eyes cluded to the screen the hole time
Well Done keep up the hard work
Good Luck In the Contest!
XxSarahxX
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Many thanks :-)
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Haha, well there goes the anonymity. I was reading the comments and saw your picture, and well, now I know who you are!!! lol But it is still a very good poem, and that is not affected by you being my friend.
lol
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Hehe
Well, I guess it could be worse, it could be anonymous, and you say that its totally utter crap, and THEN find out it was me. XD I dont know how I would have taken it... On one hand, it would have been bloody funny. On the other hand, your opinion means a lot to me.......
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LOL! True, but it wasn't crap to begin with, so yeah. lol Oh well. What's done is done and you're in my finalists, so yay. lol
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Hmmm...
I dunno, ive submitted this thing like half a dozen times and only a couple of honorable mentions so far :-P
Maybe not the mark of excellence?
David -
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Awwww well every poem can be improved, but yours is nowhere near bad. Trust me, I've seen BAD, from myself and others. lol
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Hehehehe.
After writing 5000000000 poems it stands to reason that at least ONE is bad.
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nice write
thanks
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i happily enjoyed the overall melodic perfection of your words that are magic for me! u r a high water mark with this in this comp! Good luck! and u r a finalist!
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this is a very interesting peice... good job! I like it! keep up your god work! and good luck in the contest!
love it!
Crimson -
This was really good. At first you think it's gonna be sad becuase its about war, but in the end its actually humorous! Which is a nice contrast that creates a good image. I liked the flow of this poem, most people can't do a longer poem like this because either they rhyming or the rhythm is off.
GREAT JOB!
Ashley
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wow David, being goofy or not,this is really really good. You are good at writing these kinds of poems. or songs. w/e you wanna call it. You should so right more! hehe well laterz congrats
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<3 Thanks, your too sweet.
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very good write.
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