I could count the moments
That led me to this despair
Where darkness lingers quietly
With menace in the air
Words that pierce like steel spikes
Each phrase a hammered nail
For every sentence passed on me
I'm always set to fail
I'll take what's owing to me
I'll pay for the wages of my sins
I don't care if hell is waiting
It's been heaven to where I've been
You shoot me down like paper dolls
And burn me up with your desire
Your body is so hot with lust
I'll burn in your holy fire
So don't crucify my ambitions
Don't hang me out to dry
I'll die for any belief you want
I will praise you to the sky...
So speak to me of other things
And resurrect me with your touch
I'll speak in tongues to understand
I want you oh! so much
Don't crucify my ambitions
Or hang me by my thumbs
I'll cling to life like any man
Just to be your number one
So let me live inside you
I have nowhere else to be
I'll play those resurrection blues
Until you finally set me free...
A contest entry
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Thank you for your entry, good luck, Josie
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too bad... I was looking forward to reviewing this one, but it appears this piece is entered into several contests already, so I will be removing it from the contest that I am hosting...
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Well done, I really like this peice. Thankyou for entering my contest. (sorry I havent written much but I have a lot more entries to judge)
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wow
LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE this peice.. amazing awsome.. sweet rocking .. wow.. yeah thats about it.. lol
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def a good one here; didnt break or get off topic which is great! rolled right off the tounge too! good luck in the contest
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I'm set up always to fail. wonderful line, and I relate quite well.
I'll take what's owing to me
I'll pay for the wages of my sins
I don't care if hell is waiting
It's been heaven to where I've been
and I realate so well here Too!!! *EEEEE*
This is such a great piece. This seriously made me go "WOW" please put your user name in the box. ty
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I like this poem..alot!
Fav lines
"You shoot me down like paper dolls
And burn me up with your desire
Your body is so hot with lust
I'll burn in your holy fire."
Good luck in contest -
"So let me live inside you
I have nowhere else to be
I'll play those resurrection blues
Until you finally set me free..." is my favorite part good luck -
An interesting interpreatation of the title. Thanks for entering and best of luck!
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