They cup and cradle--
callused and firm, I seem small...
dwarfed by you.
Author notes
Edited because I miscounted the syllable in the second line.
A contest entry
- Hands II by CarolDesjarlais.
525 points, ended May 9, 2007, 9 entries
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i know the feeling. great moment to capture.
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oh, wow, great poem.....the last two liens really do the trick, ty so much for entering this.
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Nice job with this. I see your didn't stick the standard and most common syllable count of 5,7,5, however the best haikus tend to be ones that don't follow the counts. Love the emotion you placed in this.
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