I sit in my chair
In a crazed daze
Thinking about how
You told me
You didn't care
Even if it was
Just a "lovers quarrel"
You know
How I can be
Overly emotional
All the time
So maybe tonight
I'll drink
Until I don't feel unwanted
Anymore
Or until I pass out
So I can't think rationally
Anymore
I laugh as I think
About what I could do to
Myself
To make you care
That knife over there
Might come in handy
I see that rat poison
Underneath the sink
We must have some cyanide
Somewhere
And Grandma's morphine
Is by her bed
My mind races
As I think of you
Holding my limp body
Wishing
You hadn't said
You didn't care
I will make you care
I thought
As I smiled
And took a large
Sip of the bottle
In my hand
Meanwhile
I'll drink myself
Into oblivion
Wishing
You would care
Author notes
Written July 25th, 2003
In a list
A contest entry
- *CuTtErS AnD SuICiDeS* by starryeyes17.
300 points, ended December 25, 2003, 41 entries
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well....hun dont let some guy make you feel bad about yourself and make you feel like you wanna die or do something to hurt yourself...no guy is worth it...it makes me so sad when a girl 'attempts' to do something to herself b/c of a guy...a guy that makes you feel like that, isn't worth it
...this could eb all made up so ill stop rambling now...lol....it was kinda confusing...but i read it again and i understood it...very personal write...goodluck hun! -lindsey
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i like this poem... i agree no guy is worth losing anything at all... and for all you guys out there no girl is worth losing anything either... i just have to say that... well i'm not sure what else to say i had to read this a few time cause it confused me the first time. hopefully the other judge understands it better then i did. well i am a blonde and arent very bright in the first place. well good luck. -gina
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I think you posted this in my contest...?? Perhaps? Maybe not. I don't really know. How did you like the TEN entrees I entered into your contest? HAHA You had to know I do the maxiumum. I even made a few new ones just for you! It's only because I love ya! (But you knew that...) Now--To the poem--Great job. And if you didn't enter it in my contest, I'm having a severe case of deja vu! LOL (Very bad case...) I LOVE THIS POEM! I LOVE THIS POEM! I LOVE THIS POEM! (I wonder how long I could possibly make this message...LOL) You've done it to me before! Haha Guess what?! I've got a lovely bunch of coconuts...There they are all standing in a row...BIG ones...small one...SOME AS BIG AS YOUR HEAD! MUhahahahahahahahahahaha! I'm so weird...But--hey--It's all good. Well girl--I got to go--It's shower time! (Yeah--Yeah--I know TOO MUCH INFORMATION! LOL) You're a great poetess--And you need to write some more so I can read it! YAY! How many times have I smiled while writing this damn thing? LOL Ooh! Look there's another one! Okay--Seriously--I'm gonna go now. Tootlez! Byez!!! << Never gonn stop! Muahahaha!
!~YS4e ~!
Scarlett -
Let me start off by expanding on the previous comments: No guy is worth losing ANYTHING. Now, onto the comment.
Whoooooa this is VIVID. Great description--even that is an understatement!! There is so much raw emotion in this piece, and really, I don't know what else TO say about it!!
Love ever-
Erica -
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Oh my God, I really hope you don't feel this way. I agree with DyingRose, NO guy is worth losing your life over. Even if you do find that one that your suppossed to be with and they like...die or something, have you noticed, there's always another? You just happened to find the first one first. Great write. -
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Wow, No guy is worth the risk of losing your life... I thought this was a devastating but in a way a wonderful write. You have always commented on my poem that I express my emotions & feeling so well in mune but yours...I stand in awe... This is awesome... This I absolutely give five stars. Great Job!
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