Reds and oranges, people think are fire,
But if you look closely,
Blues and purples you shall see.
I am those blues and purples,
Because people do not see the real me.
A contest entry
- Appealing Colors, Darkened Souls by EatYourSunlight.
300 points, ended May 16, 2007, 25 entries
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I like the imagery in this, it makes you want to get some paint out and see what you are missing. This is a bit cliche, but I find it rather appealing in this case. good write
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Very cool. Great idea.
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i understand the concept.
i do think it is abit cliche though.
especially with the whole
emo..teen..misunderstood theme.
though i disagree with the concept,
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Interresting concept but I don't really understand it.
~Chelbelle
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short and sweet. however, its very cliche and the rhyming is a bit off. lol. (is that possible in only five lines...i think so) anyways, keep writing. i'm sure your next piece shall get 3 applause from me.
love and rainbow kisses,
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I don't really see it as cliche, because not many people use that connection [correct me if im wrong]. and i did not intend for this to rhyme, but now i see some do. thanks =]
~WU -
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*offers a hug of peace* okey-dokey.
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interesting
i just really don't understand it at all
how does the first line connect with the rest of the poem?
are you saying that blue and purple is in fire and thats what the real you is?
hmmm. as you already know me, i'm probably being stupid but the way the beginning flows really confused me. -
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When you think of fire, you think of reds and oranges and yellows, no? and that is what the first line is suppsoed to ask you. the next line then goes to say, how fire isn't really reds its blues and purples [it seriously is!].. and that connects to me because when people see me they see what they want and/or expect, not the actual colors i am..
=]
~WU -
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yea yea,... i got that,
i don't know
its good just that im stupid and think that it makes sense only if you think really hard about the first line and people might not think that hard :l
i have no idea never mind
im just being dumb
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haha you are definitely not being dumb,
and i appreciate everything you have to say! i just am trying to explain my part.. come on, i know you like to argue! =]
thanks agian,
~WU
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