In a deep forest
dry skeletons slump nakedly
upon sagging earth,
damp with wilted leaves.
Twined branches point fingers
at dim moonshine and
a thick black sky,
rattling to the music of
the whistling wind.
Author notes
A contest entry
- The Ultimate Goal by N e a r.
20000 points, ended June 2, 2008, 946 entries
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nice.. loved the part for the skeletons. you've got a 24 for this poem giving you a total of 43 points. thanks for entering the contest and best of luck to you. kahy
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Wow, great job on this piece. Your imagery was great. You can just vividly see the dead coming back in autumn. I really liked your word choice as well. Great job on this piece and good luck in the contest.
Josh
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I'm really drawn to this piece.
Fantastic imagery here and I love the simplicity in this piece.
Bravo!!!
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Congratulations on the silver an excellent take on the prompt.
Sue
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Fantastic imagery here. haunted-abandoned like an old man in a wheelchair waits for some kind of medicine to spark life again, excellent work!
Congratulations on your Silver win!
Let the ink flow!
blessings, sandi
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I absolutely LOVE this piece. You took a darker edge but have embodied the essense of rebirth in my eyes. Creative and well done
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Wow! You really know how to use some great imagery skills! Short poems I really don't care for "unless" every single line packs one heck of a punch! "Twined branches point fingers," is my favorite line becuse right then I could imagine the trees prefectly and that line gave them life. Really an outstanding piece! I love each detailed and descriptive word you used in this poem, its what gave this piece a painting feel to it. Have to say that this is my top favorite nature poems. Amazing Write!
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Wow, well thanks! Your comment is very flattering! Glad you liked it.
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Excellent piece. It was very well written, full of excellent imagery. Amazing piece, thanks for sharing it, I was glad I read it.
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Thanks a bunch.
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Good job. You used imagery well. You can see everything in that deep forrest like you are standing there watching it happen.
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Great imagery.
Thank you for entering,
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Wow this is really good. You really painted a picture in my mind with your words. Great title and a period of time that does exist! Well done. Thanks for this entry and good luck.
Jeannie
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