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Liar, Liar

I'm wearing one of the rings you gave me.
Don't ask me why.
The memories are suffocating,
and I'm finding it hard to breathe
with this cigarette smoke filling my lungs.
I'm choking on your name.

I'm listening to all of our songs.
Don't ask me why.
This pain is self-inflicted,
and I can't stop crying
with your face reflected in my eyes.
I'm drowning in your voice.

I'm thinking about you, and I can't stop.
Don't ask me why.
I wasn't lying when I said I was addicted to you.
I feel like I'm dying....
I feel like I can't go on without you.

You called me strong.
I'm calling you a liar.

Please tell me what you think

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  • x ShyGirl x
    May 11, 2007
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    I like this.


  • dark raindrop
    May 10, 2007

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    wow

    I really like the raw emotion in this poem. They are very powerful. I also like the last two line of the first stanza. But i personally think the strongest lines are the last two. Very nicely done.

    Blessed Be


    • October.
      May 11, 2007
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      Thank you, as always, for reading and commenting. Glad you enjoyed.

  • Grave-Digger
    May 8, 2007
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    I'm a sexaddict. It's a real problem, I have pills and everything.


    • October.
      May 9, 2007
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      Are you serious, or just making light of the situation, like you always try to do?
      At least you're getting some, you lucky fuck.

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