Hectic
Thoughts
Immersed
Minds
Important
Things
Left
Behind
Thoughts
Float
Around
Head
Drowning
Tempting
Heart
Bled
Invisible
Image
Love:
Zero
Keep
Going
Unsung
Hero?
Author notes
This song always gets to me as a sad, dismal song although maybe that's not what the song is really about.
This poem is the story of someone blending into the background. They feel worthless, unimportant, unloved but still they struggle through life.
I don't know about the title though, so I'd wouldn't say no to some help with that!
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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wow! Don't normally like word-a-liners, but this is really effective! Love the rhyme scheme, and the last stanzas. You have a real knack for avoiding cliche rhymes! I envy you! LOL!
Well done
Katie -
aha nikki dear has slightly given away who you are lol. well neways, a very good poem, i like the use of one word per line, it works very well and gets the point across easily. i especially like the last two words, they finish it off very well. thank you for your entry, and the best of luck in the contest
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brill
very good sarah, very good indeed. even though it is only a word a line it is very affective. bravo
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I like this a lot actually, it is very individual. Good luck in the contest and take care x
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