she smiled as she killed me,
and said those evil words,
everyone stood in shock,
not believing what they heard.
"did she really just say that",
they thought in their head,
as they watched my face change,
to a look that said i wished to be dead.
this girl didn't like me,
not from the very start,
i wonder though if she relized,
how her words tore me apart.
how i threw up all the food,
or how i just wouldn't eat,
how i let her win,
as i declared defeat.
so next time you see a girl,
not as skinny as you,
please relize the damange,
your thoughtless words could do.
Author notes
the really rude girl in this is a girl on my softball team who has been out to get me since day one. i know that sounds like i'm crazy but trust me, it's true. anyway she decided to call me fat in other words and hurt me so badly...it didn't help at all that i've already been dealing with eating problems....
Please tell me what you think
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Expressive write!
Even with the misspellings & lack of grammar, I liked the way you expressed your feelings. Doing so well is the first step in the healing process as I'm sure you know. Journaling is also helpful. Pour out all the pent up feelings, look at them realistically & then ask yourself if this is the way you want to be feeling. Talk to councilors & others about the way you feel & take positive steps to change! You're on a softball team, so I know you're a go getter! Hit that ball & score a home run! Ask yourself why that girl "singles" you out. You may have qualities that make her jealous, or she may just be a very unhappy person & this is how she gets her jollies! Don't allow other people to get to you like that & most importantly, don't demean or put yourself down. I applaud you for this piece & ask you to check your verse for typos & misspelled words & you might want to get beyond that "new" trend of no caps!!! I'm really old fashioned when it comes to that! Hey...why not I'm a ding 56 & counting! Da da da da....
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First thank you so much for commenting, it really means a lot to me. I don't have to deal with that girl anymore so that's better. I have recently decided that I'm not going to allow myself to be pushed around like that, I am better than that and no one deserves to be treated badly. Also I'm sorry about all the grammer and spelling, using I am rushing to get my feelings out. Thank you again for commenting!
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Thank you for your comment on my poem Family Album. I'm sorry that you had to deal with someone so insecure with herself. I've always thought it was so sad when someone had to make someone else feel bad to maked themselves feel good. I know how hard it is to not take the bad things people say to heart, I've been there, but trust me for all the people that say mean things in your life there will be twice as many who say nice things. Try listening to the positive comments instead of the neagtive. Very relatable. Wonderful write, keep up the great work.
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thankyou so much for a lovely comment! i still don't get why others have to put people down and i don't think i even want to understand.
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good.
put thier own shit to em.
I love you.
It doesnt matter what amanda says, she si am insenitive ego-maniac bitch...she will probly be beat to death by sum guy she push to far anyway
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Beauty comesa in all shapes and sizes. Most often the one who is cruel is sad or miserable themselves and hurting others poeple is their way of dealing. Which in reality makes them ugly.
Don't take it to heart I am sure she has many faults of her own. You are you and you are beautiful. Be strong, life will get better when you learn to find people like you.
Kind and caring, full of beauty.
Nicely written and a good reminder to all who like to hurt or bully.
Best to you!
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thankyou so much! your comments are always so sweet and just make me smile!
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Bah. Girls are so cruel. I could break her down. You could too. And the fact that you haven't just shows how much more evolved and secure with yourself you are than she is.
Do look out for typos like lost-in-yesterday said.
In other news, the rhythm of this poem is stellar. The quick lines and brilliant beat of the piece really convey your anger in a wonderful way. What a beautiful, artful job at being mad! Brava!
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girls suck...lol. thankyou so much for commenting! on this and my other poems.
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wow ya know what i wanna kick her ass its ppl like her who cause ppl to get worse when their in recovery and trying to quit. that pisses me off really bad. GRR
i loved the way you put your feeling in this amazing job but one thing needs to be changed
how i let her when, <--- i tihnk that should be win right?
good luck with this and just remember it takes a hurt person to hurt the ground. it takes a harder hit person to kick some ass wheather it be with what you say or what you dont say. im here if ever u need me
jess
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thankyou so much. and im serious i hope you relize how much all your comments help.your amazing
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its rough and i know its nice to have someone who cares and thats not always easy to come by
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awwww thats hard to go through, ive had that happen to me and now i just ignore the stupid bitch that tried to ruin my life,
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ya it was hard to deal with it but the good part of it was that right after she said it we had a softball game and she screwed up her ankle and can't play for the rest of the season! talk about krama. anyway thanks for commenting!
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