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~* In Oak Frame *~ ( Poetic Story )

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Patience said, some day Prince will come~
yet it did not walk in worn shoes;
only ones fit for Cinderella’s feet,

with satin gown draped over fantasy frame,
hourglass of golden sands which sparkled
through looking glass into garden
on crystallized bottom.

The reflection cast not just a costume
for masquerade ball of life,
but mask worn to conceal character
or imperfections.

Hides Heart of inner child
within secure confines of consciousness
and core of Soul,  secrets locked
so no harm done from exposure.

Belief said, look beyond at beauty~
press palm and close eyes,
imagine paradise passed reality.
Feel the touch of Time stop,
for just a moment.

Dance on air, allow clouds to be stage...

before the brass clock strikes midnight,
as if in a Dream within Dream~
notice insecurities become insignificant,

Angelic harps announce arrival.

Beyond the banks, meadows rise
with castle under clear pillows of mist.
Just like drawings done in charcoal,
made on makeshift canvas
before slumber.

Words wandered from lips to speak,
glass catches condensation~
strong hands extend out eagerly.

Windows release wind to communicate,
breeze blows song.
Same one recited when this stranger stared
and entranced eyes turned innocently away.

His mouth motioned to come closer,
request hard to resist.
Remember drawing Prince on steed,
yet this encounter, he stood still~
firmly grounded.

It felt like feathers encompassed entirely
to finalize connection, show clearly
what needed to be seen also felt
even experienced.

Emotions evident he did not ignore...

Pure energy exchanged also glances
with hands entwined, each finger
traced over the other.

Spirit said,  to go on joint journey~
not be afraid for Mind painted picture,
has control of scenery and serenity.

Let Heart hear his beat.

He will come again, another opportunity
scribed on papyrus pages to be continued,
for a priceless part of him left permanent
after he etched his name on the oak frame…


 

 

Author notes

Once I started...the quill just kept on going...
*gasp*...lol

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  • Lj-
    July 7, 2007
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    Interesting.

    Thank you for entering,
    Good luck.


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    May 21, 2007
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    perfection~

    Sheer perfection in this poetic story sis.....
    I can see why you got the Gold...
    The imagery was breathtaking from start to finish...
    I loved every minute of this compelling read...
    CONGRATULATIONS.....!!!!!!I got Honorable Mention
    Love ya
    Your sis
    Susan~~~


  • The Cube
    May 11, 2007

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    wow, that was awesome. I felt lost in the words and it just kept on going and going...like the energizer bunny. I loved it. Well done. The italics had me tilting my head, messing with me a little bit, but I think that only added more to the imagery. Good luck in the contest as well!


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    May 7, 2007

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    Breath-takingly beautiful. The imagery and flow as well as the story as it unfolded is just wonderful. I love to see the different takes on these pictures. Very well done. Good luck in the contest.

    Jeannie


  • Ethereal One gold member
    May 7, 2007

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    Excellent imagery!

    Patience, Belief, and Spirit. You have written such a powerful translation for this picture. There are so many great lines that it is difficult to pick favorites, but I will.
    I particularly like the 4th, 5th, and 7th stanzas.
    The ending is so romantic. I can just imagine her seeing his name etched on the oak frame.

    "for a priceless part of him left permanent
    after he etched his name on the oak frame…"

    Thank you for entering this contest, and good luck!

    Aurora 2012


  • Amera gold member
    May 7, 2007

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    WoW!!!

    Absolutely awesome! I’ve never see this style used before in a poem. Patience, Belief and Spirit all interjecting different thoughts. This is so incredibly beautiful. You definitely must give your muse a raise.

    Love,
    Amera


  • penman gold member
    May 7, 2007

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    Oh my

    This was so amazing sweetheart. A truly masterful stroke of you pen. Good luck in the contest.


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    May 7, 2007

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    Omigod! How beautiful this is! Wow!
    Geez, my friend; is there not anything you CAN'T pen awesomely?!?!?!?
    This one has left me utterly speechless with its' beauty and its' depth! I wish you all the very best in this contest! Bravo and kudos to you!


  • StarEyes
    May 7, 2007

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    Can I have this as mine, in dream of memories, and ones yet to come?

    This is amazing!!!!! And made me realize, oh so much! But yet, it is a dream that one day, I think I will live........ (I hope anyways)

    Best of luck in the contest! And never let that quill stop flowing!!!!!!!

    s and much love always,

    Nettie

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