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All I Have Left Is Cliche

Jealous for  sapphire skies,

splashed with burgandy wine,

lesser orb, ruler of the night,

from twilight's fringes remains aloof

eager to bathe our midnight talks,

in soft light and drink in  love, 

so much better for the years.


Chorus
All I have left is cliche
for you steal my breath away
All I have left is cliche
for you steal my breath away

 

We laugh at those years

which have flown away

on wings weighed down

with bittersweet,

yet leaves behind

love too stubborn to go

 

Chorus

As starry curtain closes,
we cup the night’s cool breeze,
Our parched lungs drink it in;
as  north and south winds
blows upon our garden of spices.

Chorus

More than dew on meadow grass
that lay near flowing brook,
are your kisses, passionate
quenching  my thirst
stilled not by morning light

or final sunset up ahead. 

Chorus

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  • Farshid Rezaee
    May 9, 2007

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    Very Beautiful!!!

    Your poem is very beautiful with such flowery language and nice and sweet metaphorical language. You have described nature in a very memorable way. You have also expressed your hearftfelt feelings that the reader is touched by the melodious and enchanting words of yours. I enjoyed reading your poem alot. These lines were my favorite:"jealous for sapphire skies"
    "we cup the night’s cool breeze"
    Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
    Would you mind reading one of poems "Life Imitates Art"?
    http://allpoetry.com/poem/2363531 I would appreciate your comments.


  • Andy Stephenson
    May 9, 2007

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    Good lyrics

    I really like the chorus in this a lot. It has good rhythm and it rhymes of course. The verses seem like they would be a challenge. Do you have a melody? Thanks for entering my contest. I really appreciate it.

    Andy


  • Lady-Pegasus
    May 7, 2007

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    Interesting piece to be certain, nice flow to it with a wonderful concept flowing within it. I liked this one wuite a lot and feel you ahve done a wonderful job here. Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e