You’re Shadow in the Window
W. Peter Sanci May 7/ 2007
I was just walking by you’re house, a moment ago.
I though I saw you’re shadow in the window,
But just for an instant,
And then you were gone from my sight.
I went back to a time when we were together.
It felt both good and bad at the same time.
I wondered how you were doing, and if you were
alright.
It had been very long time since I had thought about
you, never mind seeing you.
My poor heart relived all over the pain we suffered
together..
But also the fun times too. It wasn’t all bad.
I prayed to God a little prayer, that you were ok.
And I kept walking on my way that very day.
A contest entry
- 6 options for everyone!! by i love teddybears.
450 points, ended June 23, 2007, 12 entries
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~zapped me~
wow.. such beauty is your poem.
love mixed with more love makes it so... sweet
my take on it if i may?
i thought the imagery was great, with the shadow etc.
and you're writing it to a "you" which made it really really mysteriously nice.
the only little thing that didn't quite click for me is that in the beginning i see and read one too many "I"s.
so i'm confused as to who's the main character.
is you you? because you're telling the story.
or is it her? because you're remembering her.
i'm sure this doesn't' call for a rewrite. but i'd love a comment back telling me.
nicely done. you have all the luck you need for this contest, including the judge's favor as well as mine.
(don't get you hopes TOO up. someone might just dazzle us as well as you did.) ~making it fair to the others~
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RIpWhoever !
Why I just wanted to thank you for taking the time to do such an in depth analysis of my poem ! That must really like it ! I will take intto consideration all of you're great points. Once aagin thanks. -
Crystal Bradford !
I just wanted to thank you for the very kind remarks you
made about my poem ! I appreciate them so very much.
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of all of your entries this one is the best
it's really good!!!
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I Love teddy bears !
Why thanks so much for you're very kind words about my poem. -
Silent cry !t
Why thanks so much for you're very kina words about my poem. You know it practically wrote itself. I was on my walk one day and I happened to look up and I thought I saw this shadow in the window. I camw home and Voila, -
I Love teddy bears !
You're making me blush. Why thanks so muchh for you're very kind words about my poem. I appreciate them so much. -
I Love teddy bears !
Why thanks so much for the kind words about my poem.
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Great write, I really enjoyed reading this.
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A silent cry !
I just want to thank you so much for you're kind words about my poem. -
A silent cry !
Why thanks so much for you're very kind words about my poem. I appreciste them so much. -
A Silent Cry !
Why Thanks so much. It practically wrote itself. I was on my walk the other day, and I looked up and thought I saw aomeone standing there. And voila.
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