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Day of a better nation

As the dragons peer over this new land
we drift away hand by hand
They stand and show their teeth with all their might
yet they say everything will be alright

They're innocent through their nature
but cant handle their own power
It takes too many lives for them to strive
and here we are struggling to survive

They've grown from DC to the shore
and every broken scale starts a war
Over the years they eat off shame
I say one day they need to be tamed

(everything under this stanza will soon be edited to flow and be a lot better)




It takes too many wars
to see through our own eyes
It takes only one day
to realize everybody cries

The execution, it is near
------?

-tone change, mellow>
*Chorus*
---?

>>>>end chorus<<

(everything below is only listed general ideas for me to edit and write out in stanzas in a creative form, it is not the final draft...its not even part of the lyrics yet)

What have we done,
look how far we have gone,
each scale represents each one of us,
every human being reflects in its eyes
its our acceptance to their mouths
we have become the food for themselves
we made ourselves slaves
now we hide in our caves
we accept every grave
of a child that the dragon said was brave

It takes too many wars
to see through our own eyes
But not everybody is seeing
so we strengthen the dawn of this new being

It takes too many people
to slay the dragons
It takes too many years
to weaken what we have created
It would take a whole new world
It would take an alteration
of human nature
It would take another leader
It would take the power we have within
to give every individual
the day of a better nation

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  • Aesthete
    May 15, 2007
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    The first two stanzas were impressiv

  • joelcederberg
    May 15, 2007
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    not my style

    but you know, whatever floats your boat. i generally try and stay away from symblozing things through the medium ofphantasy. but yea, thats just me. also, whatsup with all the notes and crap like "------?"
    and thats all pretty much. i do suport anti world killing tho. so i can appreaciate it

  • raggyann
    May 15, 2007
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    i totaly agree with this powerful poem
    this was felt deep inside me as iam a indian
    but i think that all the world has to soon relize what they hmankind has done to the earth and the land waters and skies
    that is why we now have globial warming
    and its only going to get worse great thought out poem

    . Rewarded 6