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I often sit

           and look
at the elusive elevations
of an orange moon.

With pen and paper in my palms -
trying to write the words,
whispered by the spurious wings
of wind.

     I am but an amateur,

     clutched inside universal umbrellas

     of metaphors and alliteration.

 

As clouds billow

across the horizon 

and distant birds whistle

the interlude of bedtime,

I close the curtains.

 

But the breeze still brushes

the window dressing

and shows I've slanderously slain

the cryptic reflection of poetry.

 

     I am but an unskilled individual,

     living iridescent idiosyncrasies

     of concrete and abstract concentration.

 

If only I could weave words

- like antiqued lace -

and let them dance

as beautifully as a web

waltzing with nature's breath.

 

Yet, I will always be

a 'victim' of limited eliminations

as I'm not capable

of passing provinces of literature.

 

     I am but a placeholder.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

the challenge: word bank:

in order of appearance

elusive elevations
universal umbrellas
window dressing
slanderously slain
cryptic reflection
iridescent idiosyncrasies
abstract concentration
antiqued lace
limited eleminations
passing provinces


Quite personal actually... If you failed to understand all this, translation: I am not a poet.

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  • Delicate Fire Water
    December 13, 2007

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    Wow!

    I don't know what to say about this poem as such. I was simply beautiful, however, I wasn't entirely sure what emotion/feeling you were going for in this piece of artwork. Thank you for your entry, and I wish you the best of luck,

    All my best,

    Stephi


  • grannyeri gold member
    August 22, 2007

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    Liked the brevity of the lines, the flow, the way you used these words and how they were woven together in this thread of poetry. Very creative and one that is reflective somewhere deep inside. We are all placeholders, taking our place in this journey we travel together called life. Really miss your weird and wonderful picture contests, but can see you are sppending more time writing these days. Keep well...
    Is this your picture above? Lovely too.


    • leander Moderators member
      August 22, 2007
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      Ah, the picture contests

      I was a bit disappointed when I did the last two because I had barely entries Also, very busy at work with summer season so it would have been too hectic to judge them on time too
      however, soon I'm going to continue them so I hope to see you in there back again

      Anyway, thank you for your beautiful words

  • Just4u
    August 22, 2007

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    Through the sight of MANY eyes
    The picture does unfold
    Each adding to the puzzle base
    until one reaches gold

    For our eyes do each contain
    another glimpse divine
    That when expressed facilitates
    as each new thread entwines

    Until at last the tapestry
    does stand before us bold
    A total glimpse of what is there
    that a single set of eyes don't hold

    -Eddy

    It is not through a single view that we see all but
    rather through the weaving of many views combined...

  • oldrob
    August 22, 2007
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    Great work.This is a wonderful piece


  • LadyLavender gold member
    August 21, 2007
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    your muse is definetly at its best! You are a poet...great ones never admit that they are.

  • Still Gonna Shine
    August 21, 2007
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    Fantastic job on this...I wish I could write this well.


  • storiesuntold gold member
    August 21, 2007
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    Excellent

    You did a great job on this one keep up the good writes

  • Faery of death
    August 21, 2007
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    But you are...

    Beautifully written. Sharp and true.


  • Elrenia
    August 21, 2007

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    Excellent!

    I am so happy I did not read the notes first; I think it would have ruined the whole experience for me to know that you worked from a word bank. That being said, I do believe you used the phrases given to the utmost.

    The only think I can say, other than wonderful! is that it is refreshing to read something that uses actual sentences and is still poetic, rather than just lines the writer feels is enough.

    Thank you for sharing.

    rous


  • Wonderwhenitllrain
    June 23, 2007

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    Crazy Good!

    Wow!
    If you actually think that, I'm sorry, but you must be insane!
    This poem's written beautifully!
    It's insane how our lack of talent can inspire us, and give us talent...
    Just, it's beautiifully written, I don't know what else to say...
    Great job and thanks for sharing!!!
    Amber


  • Anna Emkah
    May 29, 2007

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    You're craxy GOOD!

    Leander, my dear.... what has happened to you, that you say such things. You are one of the very best poets here in AP. I am shocked to read this nonsense. But ofcourse you only said this, because with the given wordbank you had to write a poem. I understand!!! hahaha.... VERY WELL DONE. I wished I was only half as good as you, but.... My inspiration has been gone for quite a while already. I hope by reading your work and that of others, it will come back soon. All the best, Anna

    • leander Moderators member
      May 31, 2007
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      ANNA!


      It's been sooo long that I've heard something of you and was already wondering how you were doing
      I noticed your muse isn't cooperating with you anymore since I never see you appearing on my fav's list anymore

      Hope all is wonderful for you my friend, and thank you for the visit


  • Celticmoon
    May 18, 2007

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    Lee,

    I need not even read this piece tonight as I have read it several times since you have posted it and let me just say this and know it to be true, you are the epitomy of what a poet is! If I lived closer to you I would hunt you down and spank you for saying such things about yourself, your talent, and your poetry. I will have you know I have sat so many times and wished for my work to be half as good as yours. You my dear truly are a poet and definately the aliteration king if I ever knew one! This is a fantastic piece and certainly deserves recognition as being poetry and you for being the fab poet you are. You are one of the best of this site and I can only pray form my work to be half as good as yours.

    Bravo on an excellent piece that shows a personal view of self and talent!





    Love ya,
    Bel

  • Celticmoon
    May 18, 2007

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    100

    I was going to chew on you here for you self esteem issues but I won't..instead I'll do that in private.

    As always you have brilliantly accomplished your task with amazing results. You have taken the word bank and painted a beautiful yet sad canvas. Breathtaking.


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    May 10, 2007

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    This is a fantastic piece. You can feel it emanating from the page. But as for "I am not a poet" That is such B.S. I could slap ya silly if it weren't your birthday. You are one of the BEST poets I've ever read and I mean that sincerely. So buck up! Shine! Love you


  • Danny Beatty gold member
    May 10, 2007

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    liaar liar liar. this is pure poetry:
    If only I could weave words
    - like antiqued lace -
    and let them dance
    as beautifully as a web
    waltzing with nature's breath.

    pure light. no words. liar! placeholder my you know what. wow. beautiful work. sheesh yer nose must be l8 feet long. not a poet. ;) dude!


  • Nicolette gold member
    May 10, 2007

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    Oh you are not just a mere placeholder, my friend...you are an excellent poet and you've captured the orange moon here with such skill. Simply beautiful poetry - and wow, the way you've weaved the word bank into this is simply amazing. Only when I got to the author's comments did I see the world bank challenge. Looks like a winner to me....think you can put a gold trophy on the shelf.

    And happy birthday again, dear friend . I wish you many more great poems like this one.

    ~ Nicolette

  • PalmettoSky
    May 10, 2007

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    well you certainly have huge talent in the writing department. I loved this. how cool is a word bank? you make it seem easy (it's not!) keep up the great work. peace and light, Kendal


  • delightfulmess silver member
    May 10, 2007
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    I think you are more than capable and this is a skilled peice of poetry, very well put together.


  • Yemassee gold member
    May 8, 2007
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    Do you mean, "eliminations"

    We're all just placeholders for someone or thing, who of us reach the heights of natures "words" for example.

    They say it's good if a writer (or anyone) isn't happy with his work, that it proves his desire to perfect his craft, that he is never happy with his output. Poems are never finished. (so I hear...mine are finished before I write them, lol)

    You do of course have far more talent that you admit, but then again I'm not in your head and don't know what you expect of yourself.

    It's good Leander, very good, far more than a placeholder and I know a thing or two about placeholders.


  • Canto-Brasileiro
    May 8, 2007
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    Oh boy! What a wonderful sight and poem!

    A lua derrama sua leitosa luz
    sobre os meus sonhos em dias e noites
    quando penso em pedaços de poesia
    que possam expressar um pouco da minha alma
    A lua, reflete os desejos guardados
    atrás da cortina do meu sonho

    You inspire


    • leander Moderators member
      May 10, 2007
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      I'm still wondering what that all means lol


      • Canto-Brasileiro
        June 5, 2007
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        I have an orange moon, a photo of it I took myself. As Tess says, I'm obsessed with the moon

      • Celticmoon
        May 10, 2007
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        In regards to the comment made above by Canto-Brasileiro, he was speaking in portuguese and the translation for what he said is as follows:


        The moon spills its milky light on my dreams in days and nights when I think about poetry pieces that can express a little of my soul the moon, reflect the desires kept behind the curtain of my dream





        Hope this helps you Lee

        • Canto-Brasileiro
          June 5, 2007

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          Muito boa tradução Celticmoon!
          And don't believe him when he says I have billions of nicknames.
          Lele é assim, exagerado


          • Celticmoon
            June 5, 2007
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            Obrigado! Eu sei que gosta exaggerado muito muito. I, agora, am esse com milhão nomes, apenas não neste local

        • leander Moderators member
          May 11, 2007

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          It's one of my AP mom's billions of nicknames lol

          thank you for the translations sweety now I know what it means


    • Yemassee gold member
      May 8, 2007

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      This is for Canto-Brasileiro:

      Write in English, I get paranoid and think you're talking about me.


  • Lost Like Woah
    May 8, 2007

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    liar liar

    you are an amazing writer..i would'nt say that to just anyone. you have a way about you that just ties world together, and at times chills my bones. you are a wonderful poet with amazing control of the english language

  • mcheadle
    May 7, 2007

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    You sir are getting close

    You have a fine start. First You just have to leave the "not" out and you will be on your way it does take time. When you started to write could you do the Gettersburg address " better than how I spelt it" well you write and I'll learn more on how to spell and I'll bet you beat me sport .. just give it a try.


  • Lady-Pegasus
    May 7, 2007

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    Now see, i happen to think you do weave your words quite well especially in this touching piece. Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e *

  • Bapudi
    May 7, 2007

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    open, honest

    This has a realy personal openness that I really love. I love the stance that you aren't a poet, and yet...this is a beautiful poem. You managed to comment poetically on your own percieved lack of poetic talent. My advice: stop being so hard on yourself. I really love: "I've slanderously slain/the cryptic reflections of poetry." It's almost a critique of certain poets who feel they have to be cryptic to be artistic.


  • Kari gold member
    May 7, 2007

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    I can actually relate to this poem here. I love all of the beautifully penned metaphors in this piece. Great job!

    Kari

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