Trapped in a world,
seemingly light years away.
In a place that unfurled,
by his birth on that day.
A place of confusion,
what is or isn't real.
An optical illusion?
Not to see what you feel.
What may or may not be,
whether inside or out,
holds captive or sets free,
adding to or relieving doubt.
Thoughts and emotions spinning,
playing russian roulette.
Never losing or even winning,
no clarity as of yet.
But then she was there,
and little did he know,
that he could even dare,
his real self he might show.
Slowly but eventually,
confusion began to fade.
The duality was essentially,
perfection as portrayed.
Only distance now the concern,
still seemingly light years away.
Hearts continue to yearn,
for their homecoming day.
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A contest entry
- My First Picture Contest by Ethereal One.
900 points, ended May 20, 2007, 18 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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excellent~
Such yearning love for someone....
You penned this so very well...
I agree with Jeanette a romantic/fantasy like mood....
For the one day they can indeed be truly together...
Congrats on the BRONZE sweetie...I got honorable mention
Do hope you come give me a read as well
Hugs
Susan~~~
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very good
maybe the world today is just a optical illusion then maybe if we could find some new corrective lenses we may not see Bush making an ass out of himself stating Liz II was in the states in 1776 though she is starting to show her age alot
love the papa
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very tender words
Your words express the strong love and longing she has for her love so far away. Feeling stuck in the wrong place, but still yearning for the day they can be together.
I like the romantic/fantasylike mood you have created in telling the reader about their love.
Thank you for entering this contest, and good luck!
Aurora 2012
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this is a stunning write and suits the picture brilliantly... i wish you lots of luck in the contest
cheers
Jen
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I also liked where you took this picture
it had a story like form within the poetry
and held me captive till the end,
Thanks for sharing,
WArm thoughts
frozentearz -
Very nice depiction of the picture. A sense of more than it seems appears in this piece to me. Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e *
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Outstanding
Wow! This is an outstanding and deep poem. You have done an incredible job and it fits the picture perfectly. Bet no one can create a better piece than this. Best of luck in the contest.
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