my thoughts are uncontrolled
and they spill out on the page
written out in screams and cries
to take care of all my rage
why can't everything go right
why is it all wrong
how come i can't be happy for now
instead of angry all along
words, phrases, memories
they fill my crowded head
i'm afraid they'll always be there
haunting till i'm dead
always have something to write
something to simply say
why can't i stop my thinking
why's that not okay
my mind is overcome with fear
for what tomorrow will bring
ideas and thoughts reapear
i force them back again
why can't i stop thinking
analyizing what i say and do
why can't i just stop and sleep
so i can be happy too
i want to write out every thought
to clear my messy brain
i want to organize my thoughts
so i can breath again...
Author notes
written by: poeticmind
A contest entry
- Let It All Out by BeautifulDisaster9.
525 points, ended May 10, 2007, 21 entries
Honorable mention
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Comments
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This was a really good piece and very heartfelt. I love the emotions as well as the rhyming. Congradulations on your win.
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Wow!
This is really good. The only thing I would suggest is to check your spelling and grammar a bit, but other than that, awesome! Nice rhyme scheme, and a topic that I can deeply relate to which made it all the more appealing to me as the reader. Well done.
Best of luck and thanks for entering!
<3BeautifulDisaster9
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