Trapped within this sickened mind,
these feelings twist and bind my fate,
dancing on my tightened nerves,
cauterizing gaping wounds.
The jaws of life come crashing down,
i feel there's something watching me.
Demons laughing at my pain,
mocking all my pent up hate.
Voices scream into my head,
thoughts of death and endless pain,
dark, eternal solitude
I'm psychotic and delusional.
Locked in endless purgatory,
dancing through remaining flames.
Clouds have thickened,
cloaked in darkness,
internal asphyxiation.
The light is dimming from my eye's,
devouring all that once was there,
shaking on this bed of nails,
skin is pierced and dripping blood.
I feel that ghostly apparition,
cats are prancing on my grave,
eye's of lit and piercing gold,
claws extended for the kill.
My brain is racing, passing time,
i listen to the lullabies,
praising death for all it's beauty,
furled inside a blood red rose.
A pedal falls,
the pieces missing,
it hits the ground,
silently shattering.
Music to this solemn elegy,
immersed in pain, another cut,
crimson string of past regrets,
arching across my snow white flesh.
I look into these swollen eye's,
haunted by my dark reflection,
i smash the glass in raging haze,
wrists are sliced and bleeding pain.
I sob and cry
my life drains out,
i slice my throat,
to mute myself.
Bleeding out these tragedies,
dripping pedals red with blood.
Surrounded by the missing pieces,
burnt alive to purify,
burning ashes of the wake,
the remnants of my shattered life.
Author notes
Author name: Biskit (option #2)
ONCE AGAIN, DON'T WORRY ABOUT ME. Just ideas and emotions, NOT NOT NOT SUICIDAL. NONE OF YOU HAVE TO WORRY ABOUT THAT! I PROMISE YOU ALL!
A contest entry
- Let It All Out by BeautifulDisaster9.
525 points, ended May 10, 2007, 21 entries
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i absolutely love this poem.
"Trapped within this sickened mind,
these feelings twist and bind my fate".....thats my favorite line, it just sounds so much like the way i feel. Very good write
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I liked this. My favorite part was
A pedal falls,
the pieces missing,
it hits the ground,
silently shattering.
I think you meant 'petal' not 'pedal,' though I could be wrong. I like the imagery in here. It really expresses how a suicidal person might feel. Good job~
~*~VampQueen~*~
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Wow awesome imagery. Alot of emotions and pain expressed, fantastic job, very blunt yet descriptive, loved it!!!
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wow this was really good. i love the emotion you put into. i love the details the descriptions all of it. This flowed wonderfully. You are a talented writer. thank you for entering it into the contest. I enojoyed reading it. I'm glad that its just ideas and emotions. You expressed them well. great job.
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Well I must say, very detailed, and I love the way it flowed. The imagination used here was unreal, and I'm amazed by it. Thank you, and goodluck.
Jordan Lee -
very good write. i like it a lot. please read the rules and change this accordingly. when you have done that message me. please and thank you. good luck to you in my contest.
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ok. I put my author name in the box. Oops, i did that to the wrong poem. LOL. Ok, better? ha, sorry -
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thank you for that lol. good luck to you in my contest.
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Whoa.
This is amazing. ....Nuff said....
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Wow.
Amazing job Darci. Another brilliant piece. Wow. That's the best word for it. Good job. I really like your work. My favorite line is "crimson string of past regrets". Wow Darci. Keep up the amazing work. -
Wow...
this piece was wickedly deep and emotional...thanks for putting that in the author comment box, after reading this I probbaly would've e-mailed the police just to see if you were ok, but that kind of description is what a reader needs to feel some relevant satisfaction, yearning in deep suspense...i like this piece a lot...you have a very rare talent, you can make the reader feel all the pain and yet make them shake with worry and then ease them again with the morbid description that you display...awesome write
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LOL
THANKS! Now i'm GLAD i put that in the Authors comment, lol. Greatly appreciate your words of appraisel, when my computer is working better....i'll give you points for your comment!
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