suicide,
it's on my mind.
hurting one last time...
Its not like they would care
Or even notice I wasn't around
They would all be releived!
Its one less person
They have to worry about.
They would finally have the piece and quiet,
They so badly
[[Want]]
And
[[Need]]
I'm just a
NO
BODY
To everyone else...
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hmm i dunno what to say... i rote it after a fight id had with my family. its how i felt i cant help that
Please tell me what you think
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defo can relate to this....thought bout killin myself soooo many times, bt jus never ad the courage, until one day i cut myself rele deep, kinda freaked myself out a bit, n now im trying to overcome my addiciton to cutting, so rele suicide is not the way to get noticed....if u eva need to tlk, ill listen
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I'd take out the brackets. Brackets are used to show something that's been omitted. You don't need them here.
PEACE and QUIET. Typos.
Not too bad. Short. Not fond of the format, but like the simplicty and rhyme.
I've felt this way many times before, but I have also had many dramatic moments where I've come to find that the people I think really don't care really do (maybe even more than the people I think care most). It's just they're not that good at showing it and maybe even we should show it a little more.
I wrote a poem you might find interesting called, "Now That I'm Dead." If you're interested, you can probably dig it up real quick doing an allpoetry search on the bottom of the right sidebar. Just search for the title. It's about killing yourself, but as a ghost, realizing all the people really did care and are now mourning you.
Keep writing.
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i can really relate to every thing you said. "im just a nobody to everyone else" thats how i feel every single day...
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oh im sorry you feel that way too. if u ever need to tlak im here...
take care
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luv HB
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I remember this feeling, darling
How about me? Did you not get my IMs I sent u after u asked whether u could help? I'd miss you and I'd notice and nobody's a nobody unless they wana be!!!!
love you sissy
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umm i dont rememebr if i got ur IM's thanks for them n e way tho
and thanks so much! on AP eveyrbody is so supportive, and r always there! i wish the people on AP were my friend sin real life coz they understand! u understand me sis! and r always there. but sometimes people on AP cant be there coz im not on the comp, u no?
anwyays thanks alot for your comment
i am actually doing alot better atm...
love you so so much sis!!!!
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Aww I sometimes think so, too. Though you mustn't lose your real life friends for those on AP, no matter how loving and caring they may seem I miss not being on the comp, too, though that's only sometimes. I'm trying to find a new life at the moment.
love you bunchieeeeeeeees
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thanks, yea i no. i would never forget my real mate in real life
love you
love HB
XoXoX
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oh my god i love it. you were right. and i think the choice of words you used were perfect. i loved the layout and design too, which led it to have an awesome flow. i especially liked the stanza "suicide, it's on my mind. hurting one last time..." infact i love all the words and stanzas and inserts. great work. stay safe.
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thanks i am very glad you liked it
this one was very different for me.
take care, and member im always here
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This is a difficult feeling/thought to deal with sweetie, and I'm so proud that you have not given into it! Things are hard right now, but keep hanging in there! You're so much stronger than you think, and you are worth far more than you realise. You are not a nobody to me, and I know that others feel the same. Whilst people may not understand what you are going through, and may even unintentionally make you feel worse, all most of us want is to see you get through Don't go disappearing anytime soon gorgeous!! (And there is nothing wrong with feeling this way, so don't apologise for your personal thoughts/feelings)
Okay, so I've rambled a lot. My point is: I love you, I would miss you, you're beautiful and talented and a wonderful person, and you will get through this in the end!
Don't give up sweetie! I love you! xoxox
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thanks for your comment sweetie, and for always being there!
also just keep in mind most of my poems r about whats going on thru my head, and not always about what i am GOING to do.. you no? i right it coz i feel it. hmm dunno if it makes sence but oh well
i love you heaps and heaps too hun, dont forget it either!!
i'v got ur bak.
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So Sad !
I hope that you are feeling better now and that being able to write about the way you were feeling helped 
Keep fighting those demons. You are a strong, beautiful person and I know you will beat this. Take care Love you lots xxxxx
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i am feeling a little bit better tonight thanks AP mum.
thanks alot for ur encouragement
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That's good to hear. Keep your chin up and never forget you are loved. xxxxx
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sad piece...the writing style was a little bit different which I really enjoyed and i hope to read more of your work soon
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i dont usually right like this, but i thoguth id try somthing new...
thanks for the comment and applause
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WOW.....
great rite, but sad.....
"they would finally have the peice and quite,
they so badly
[[want]]
And
[[need]]"
Ive felt that way a lot recently.....
you cant help what you feel...
jenn
{rocklover}
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thank you for the comment..
its true u cant help how u feel. but alot of the time its because of other ppl.
if u ever needa talk just IM me i will always tyr to help...
take care
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