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Castles in the Sky

I'm standing here as time goes by
Building my castles in the sky
Reflections of my hopes and dreams
For life is never as it seems

Within my castle is a hall
Where fantasies are standing tall
They shine, mirrored before my eyes
If only I was not so wise

I look again, just one last time
Knowing that they will not be mine
I shake my head,then turn away
All gone, those dreams of yesterday

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  • Endeavor gold member
    May 21, 2007

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    Very Good


    I look again, just one last time
    Knowing that they will not be mine
    I shake my head,then turn away
    All gone, those dreams of yesterday

    This is quite good
    You are a romantic no doubt

    Rick


  • Quiet places
    May 8, 2007

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    Another Great Write

    Very interesting dream write! Well done in painting a unique setting and knowing it's not for real, Don


  • Ethereal One gold member
    May 7, 2007
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    very sad

    You express sadness so well in this poem. To realize your hopes and dreams will not be coming true, is heartbreaking.
    You provide the reader with some wonderful images. The rhythm and rhyme is excellent.

    Thank you for entering this contest, and good luck!

    Aurora 2012


  • acrackedmirror
    May 7, 2007

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    The imagery is great. It reminds me of dreams of my own that have been deferred. I guess that I will have to start building my own castles in the sky!

  • mama-drama
    May 7, 2007

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    I like the length, not too long, not too short. You bring out those emotions well, kinda made me start building castles too, then u remind me that sadly, its all dreams.I enjoyed it.Best of luck in the contest.

    Tessa


  • swanridur
    May 7, 2007

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    Very sad and poinient......nice rhyming. Sometimes it can be a smack in the face when you realise you are living the fantasy and you have finally accept reality and 'wise up'. Thank you


  • Iliad Keys
    May 7, 2007
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    Bravo!!! What an excellent piece of writing! First off, the title is perfect, the theme is well played on, and the words themselves are fabulous. Simple words, I'll grant, but written in such a flowing, unforced way that it just seems like a cloud. Well done.


  • Luciferschild
    May 7, 2007

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    very personal and symbolic of the pain of realizing your dreams are gone or unacheivable like ive fely a bit too much, i liked it

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