Look into my eyes
Tell me what you see
Tell me what you feel
Tell me what you believe
Watch as my life passes me by
With the vastness of my destiny meeting me at once
Is it me living my life
Or
Is it everyone else living it for me
I see you living happily
But I know the real you
The real person inside
The truly tortured soul
Look at me and tell me
Tell me what I want to hear
Or
Tell me what I need to hear
What I want to hear is destiny
What I need to hear is reality
Reality is the true focus of life
Destiny is simply an unplanned future that can be altered at any second
I look into your eyes and I see the true darkness in your soul
Look into my eyes
See what you believe
My destiny is to be with you
But I must face the reality that I cannot be with you
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is very nice.Even though its sad....it has a lot of meaning to it.U express urself very strongly to where the reader can feel ur pain.Thats definitly what u need when u write poetry.Good job.
~Tia~
GOD BLESS
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Yeah, I've been through this. I'm sorry you had to deal with that. It must hurt a hell of a lot for you. I hope you feel better. I love this write. much love. <3
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I wish i had talent like you. Your poems are so truthful, they catch the obvious truth that no one seems to notice. It right there, but no one pays attention. Then again, i could just not know what i'm talking about. But hey, whatever. Anyway, i'd like to know what you think of some of my other poems. You don't have to, and theres no rush if you want to, but you said you read my other poems, so i'd like to know what you thought of those.
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I liked the use of imperatives here, it added power to the poem. I found this poem quite sad as it seemed to imply that life was sad and that the audience was as sad as the speaker but trying to hide it (could just be my interpretation)
Pozo
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