So scared, confused. So broken, am I
As I stare at the walls surrounding us.
My heart is broken, scars torn open
And I don't know who I am anymore.
Would I ever wish for those days again
Or would I pretend that I never loved you?
Would you bruise my heart until it bleeds
Twisting my fears into your ugliness?
Or would you hide, in an angel's disguise
Cover me with poisonous kisses until I drop dead?
So haunted by your memory, so frightened I am.
I scream into the darkness, and it swallows me whole.
Thus, it is time to leave the broken road
Step out of the shadows and into the sun.
For your reign of terror over me has come to an end.
No longer will you haunt my dreams.
For my pain has finally drawn to a close
And I am leaving here tonight, for I am free.
I have escaped, through the last open door
Locked you behind, with all fear and doubt.
A place of darkness, to which I will not return
Shadows of my past that will never see the light again.
And as the last star falls, I hope that you hear my wish.
We have nothing, and you are dead to me.
So remain behind the wall, hidden for eternity
And I will remember you not, so long as you are locked away.
For I have woken from the nightmare at last, my love
And the best part of loving you is not loving you anymore.
Author notes
"Fear is only in our minds..."
This is a fairly personal write, though it also goes along with the story of how the album "The Open Door" was inspired by Amy's relationship with Seether frontman, Shaun Morgan. I've been where she has, so I tied the two ideas together. Enjoy!
The title is that of the second album, "The Open Door".
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"For I have woken from the nightmare at last, my love
And the best part of loving you is not loving you anymore."
A beautiful ending for such a beautiful poem. This poem is so great, it could just really be a song! It's awesome! You put your feelings into it and really made such a personal and lovely poem. Great work!! Thanks for entering -
OMG!! Awsome write, this needs to become a song sung by Amy.. I love this poem for two resons, One = You wrote it from the heart and you weren't afraid to show it. Second = You put everyones feelings into words that they are afraid to say. "My heart is broken, scars torn open
And I don't know who I am anymore." Is to me the best part of the poem , you summed up everyon's feelings that had their heart broken...
Thank you so much for entering, Good Luck.
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thank you for entering! one word could sum this all up AMAZING! I love it! so deep and true! great, great job and good luck
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Wow, this is good. thanks for your entry.
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WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
this one is awesome i like the way your poems flow . it seems that you really open yourself up to write. that is great you have great talent.
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oh my those last lines were quite powerful well done here
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I loved this! Of course I'm an Evanescence fan. I think Amy Lee would like this. You have a knack for these dark kind of writes. Maybe you could write songs for Amy Lee heh. Seriously though, I wish my writing matched yours. I aspire to be as good as you.
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wow you are extreemly talented
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wow. awesome poem, wanna give me some tips?
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this is truely one of my FAVORITE things i have read in a really long time, the Emotion just pores out of every word just awesome i dont know what more i can say it is undiscribable, it just feel it!
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Very deep feelings expressed very well from a true poetess, very nice work here
Blessed Be
Adriana -
For I have woken from the nightmare at last, my love
And the best part of loving you is not loving you anymore.
how true your last lines are. This is a wonderfully created piece of work and I enjoyed it a lot. Thanks
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Wow I say this to one poet each day and today is your lucky day! This is the best poem i have read today! yea it is brilliant! I love it! And i have read i don't know 32 poems today?? Great job with this one. The discriptive writing is the best thing to have in a poem!
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BRILLIANT
This is amazing I love how you mixed the two together you did so great!!! This poem flows so well and just the words come together and is really easy to perceive!!! Great Job!!!
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Thank you for sharing such an intimate part of yourself. This was heartfelt, and was an enjoyable read. "Or would you hide in an angel's disguise, cover me with poisonous kisses until I drop dead." Definitely my fave line here. Thanks for entering the contest.
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I love that Album....
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This is a really great write. I'm glad this person was able to walk away from the destructive person in their life. Great write, thank you for entering the contest. Good luck.
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whisper
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I can relate a lot to this.
i love it!
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This one is raw. I can understand how you feel and yet of course because its personal, I can see you have your own personal interpretations. I'm pretty much this way with Karl at the moment.
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wow this is a great poem that you have written. I can relate to pretty much of this poem. I love the last two lines so very much. now if I could get to that point, it would be so much better for me. Bravo, this is a great poem. thank you for sharing this with me.
good luck in the contest.
kat
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I can relate to this. hope that you feel better soon. thank you for your entery into my contest. some advice... try not to hang on to something that hurt you that much. seek for things to fulfill you. happiness is not too hard to find. all you need to do is free yourself. love lola
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Most excellent!
Thank you so much for sharing and for being a part of the contest!
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For I have woken from the nightmare at last, my love
And the best part of loving you is not loving you anymore.
I like it! I found this wandered a little but it seemed appropriate for the situation. I’m impressed.
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I love this. It explains things so well. And it reminds me of the poem I wrote earlier. I hate the feeling of being in love and people taking advantage of it. I finally got over one guy. It took me the whole summer. But I finally stepped out of my shell and tried again and I found the most amazing person. I love this poem alot.
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The closing was really good.
Thank you for entering,
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I think this poem would have faired very well in the ‘Dark’ category or even ‘Love’ but I can understand why you chose to enter it here as is not only covers those subject areas but others too and for that reason I think your poem should stay in this category.
The impact it had on me after the first read was it hit me right between the eyes because of the sheer power and determination emanating from the work. This is a very positive start for a read because it immediately caught my attention and almost demanded that I go back and read it again for the deeper elements within the piece to be exposed.
After subsequent reading I found the poem to be worked in two clear sections, the first half concentrating on the feelings of the author, how the pain and darkness had been caused and developed, then the second half demonstrates with great determination, the escape and resolution never to return.
The one area where I felt this piece was lacking was in the use of imagery. Although imagery is used I think it could be worked upon, possibly with the use of some more expressive adjectives but as this is a personal write about feelings and issues rather than anything else, getting imagery right is extremely hard and I appreciate that fact.
I liked the use of rhetorical questioning and feel it adds greatly to the first half of the poem. The author has created intense feelings throughout and the firmness of the last 6 lines draw it all to a strong conclusion. The impact and effectiveness of the last line says it all for me.
Thank you for entering the Raven Contest 2007 and good luck with your entry! Your work may also be viewed by other Raven judges.
Northern Raven
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the words do remind me of an evanescence song, but still a very unique write.
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Excellent write, and one I am sure Amy herself would absolutely love. Thanks for entering and good luck to you.
**Ktulu Blackwolfe** -
wow
this is like a love nightmare, so dark and sad: falling deep into nothingness, iam no more... excellent poem
red roses
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For I have woken from the nightmare at last, my love
And the best part of loving you is not loving you anymore.
i love that last line. great write. very emotional. good luck in the contest.
sam
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