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Charlie of Urinetown

Hey Charlie, there's this girl that we both know.
Her name's Joanna, come on, I know you know!
You've hung out and talked, she's more than a noun,
She even went and saw your musical Urinetown.

There's something that she just can't say.
She wants to, but can't find the way.
You joke and stick your feet in her face.
She wants you to get to more than first base.

Come on dude, you know you want to.
So get up and put on your converse shoes.
Go see her, call her, or write her a note.
Write her a poem, then read what you wrote.

She'll be there waiting, she really likes you.
Even your jokes and weird things you do.
So call her up, give her a chat.
Buy her,(if she wants it) a hairless old cat.

Do you understand everything I'm trying to say?
She wants to date you, starting today.
So go ahead, and dial that phone.
You can date her, and not have to be alone.

Author notes

This a poem for Joanna to Charlie. If this poem gets picked, I hope it works!

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  • May 14, 2007

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    I personally love this, your poem is fantastic and definitely what I was looking for in this contest. Great job!


    • mon amour ange
      May 15, 2007
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      Thanks so much for the comment! I'm glad that you liked it so much!
      ~Mon Amour Ange


  • theredcatjazzoflove gold member
    May 8, 2007

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    I WANT YOU....

    TO BEFORE YOU WRITE START A PLOT. THIS POEM IS GOOD BUT IF YOU START A PLOT BEFORE YOU WRITE YOU WILL BE SO MUCH MORE SURPRISE HOW INTRESTING YOUR WRITING WILL BECOME. I AM TELLING YOU THIS CAUSE I SEE THE POTENTIAL IN YOUR WRITINGS. YOU START OFF GOOD AND THEN IN THIS PIECE YOU GO OFF TO ANOTHER UNIVERSE. YOUR RHYMING IS ON PART BUT YOU TAKE YOUR STORY TO A LOT OF DIRECTIONS THAT YOU CAN PUT MORE OF A MEANING BEHIND. HUGS!!!! I APPAUD IT CAUSE ITS GOOD.


    • mon amour ange
      May 8, 2007
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      Thank you so much! I really appreciate the advice and the wonderful comment! I'm so glad that you like it!
      ~Mon Amour Ange


  • RavenessHeart
    May 7, 2007

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    this is gold, he he he well done i love this poem. you have a great imagination, i want a hairless cat lol.

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