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Highashighcanbe

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On the other side of Mars

Beyond the Moon and past the stars

There lives a Martian small and green

The strangest guy you’ve ever seen

 

His name is Highashighcanbe

He doesn’t look like you or me

But he’s the nicest guy you’ll meet

He’ll shake your hand using his feet

 

With his little turned up snout

He sniffs the silver moon beams out

Then puts them in his stardust stew

He’ll gladly share a bit with you

 

He has three eyes and pointed ears

So he can see each word he hears

He watches TV in his bed

With small antennas on his head

 

And in his little rocket ship

He loves to fly and dive and dip

If you watch the nighttime sky

You might see him soaring by

 

So keep a watch out for him there

As he comes zipping through the air

And when he lands and comes to greet

Be sure to shake hands with your feet

 

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  • MJ Forgives
    December 18, 2009
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    This is a really cute poem. I hope you do well in my contest and thanks for entering. Love and Peace!
    -Jess


  • Melodies
    August 17, 2007
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    So excellent and fine!

    I am smiling again at this happy and splendid poem and I am carrying it away to Poetry Planet! Thank you very much dear poet!


  • YoursTrulyJulie gold member
    June 20, 2007
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    This is so good I can see why it won you a trophy. Well done indeed.


  • Denierim
    May 24, 2007
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    This is so cute lol
    This is one of those poems that could fit to children's poetry books

    This one brought an even bigger a smile on my face and I like that about a poem. I'm usually not too big a fan of silly poetry but this one just struck a nerve and made me giggle. Thanks for sharing this one

  • montez gold member
    May 10, 2007
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    sizzlingly silly!

    Super silly poem Steve.
    Well worth the big clap!
    R**


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    May 7, 2007

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    Bravo!

    My goodness. Such wonderful pieces have risen from this contest and here you are, no exception with a stunner. I loved this. Wonderful wonderful. ~Pamela


  • Lady-Pegasus
    May 7, 2007

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    TEEHEE This is wonderful and very imaginative, well done! Interesting piece to be certain, nice flow to it Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e


  • Elrenia
    May 7, 2007
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    How cute! Just the sort of thing a child would love to hear.

    Well written and nicely formed. The reading was smooth and even.
    This makes me want to meet the little guy. Any chance of that? I am looking for a new "friend".

    Well wishes in the contest.
    Thank you for sharing.

    rous

  • oldpoets
    May 7, 2007
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    A refreshing write, cheerful easy to read. We all need a little humor in what we write.

  • restful.soul
    May 7, 2007
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    good write


  • GiveMeTheGun
    May 7, 2007

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    fun

    i enjoyed reading this, it was cute. i love the background for it as well, it fits beautifully. awesome work. laterz


  • firechilde
    May 7, 2007

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    Really great write

    This is delightful! I love this poem.It is so light and cheerful and perfect.Thank you for creating it.

  • torturedsoul9876
    May 7, 2007

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    I enjoyed reading this poem its a very good write you should keep up the good work i look forward to reading more of your work. if you would like you can look at mine as well.

  • I have a couple of suggestions.....
    His name is Highashighcanbe
    He doesn’t look like you or me
    But he’s the nicest guy you’ll meet
    He’ll shake your hand using his feet
    I think the flow would have been better if you edited the third line and said "...you'll EVER meet" the flow kinda went rough for me at that line....

    He has three eyes and pointed ears
    So he can see each word he hears
    He watches his TV in bed
    With small antennas on his head
    I also think that if you re-arranged the words in the third line of this stanza to "He watches TV in his bed" it would sound better....

    This was an adorable write.....i bet children would LOVE this.....good luck in the contest, and keep up the good work!


  • meoncloud9
    May 7, 2007
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    Well.. At the begining I did not understand why the title did not have spacing in between but later I found out that it was a name The words are simple and easy to understand. Very good for me as I don't have to open my dictionary each n every time I read a new word Quite funny and well written!!


  • Melodies
    May 7, 2007
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    You have bounteous talent!

    YES!!! So wonderfully penned, dear poet person! I am astonished by your delightful rhymes and exceptional flow as the lines cascade down in such a wonderful manner! Thank you for bringing this radiant poem to our Mars Party!

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