Brilliant…vivid! Like the 4th of July
So silky…smooth, SCREAM and CRY
I recollect that touch—it meant so much…
Cyclical patterns with dazzling hue
That one in the center…I think it’s YOU
Built up grains with opposing view
Cropped by colors—an Autumn spew
Dew drops of light and prints so tight
Overlapping like the massage I gave that night…
Five fingers depressed…then added five more
I rotated the muscles—since they were sore
Do you see the mark of those hands resemble flames?
The unsettled sparks and prints with no names
Yea, these hands…these hands have so much to do
They were never meant just for two…
In a list
A contest entry
- Hands by CarolDesjarlais.
525 points, ended May 7, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I like this piece. It makes me wonder if I had more hands would I really be able to do more work or would the hands just get in each others way. Good job!
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Thanks. This was entry into a contests (notes above); it was the second one I entered in about 4 days time. There was a picture/painting of colorful hands (like an oil painting or something) and rules stressed to write w/ as much emotion-evoking stuff as possible. This was all I could come up with at the time. I didn't win anything but it was a good exercise (I think). I'm glad you liked it. Thanks a lot.
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well done sir!
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Just like I like my meat sir. lol. Thanx for your opinion.
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Who does not feel tug of heart at ..."I recollect that touch—it meant so much…" and this... "That one in the center…I think it’s YOU"
those really gave this poem punch....great job and ty for entering.
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Thanx again. I am not really into entering contests and so I was kind of sketish about this one. Well, now it's over and I can exhale (lol). And I suppose being a poet, you are not often short on words. Your kindness regarding my poem causes me to feel content. You're very welcome.
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