The rain falls outside, as if to mimick my tears,
I sit here and wonder....where did I go wrong?
You'll have my whole heart in your hands...forever.
Why do you treat it the way that you do?
It's been broken...and bandaged...and broken again,
Yet you toss it about...like a rag doll that's faded and worn.
It means nothing to you I know...you've proved that.
But when I gave it to you...you promised me...
No matter what you wouldn't shatter it completely again.
Why can't you look me in the eyes or speak to me?
Are you putting on an act? Does it hurt you too?
Do you lay awake countless nights, hoping things will change?
Do you drink and drink and drink some more?
Are you getting so high you could rake the ducks out of the sky?
You break me down a little more each time I see you...
Because you can smile...when all I can do is sit here and cry.
Author notes
This was a short poem for a contest, but I decided to add onto it. I'm not great with free verse so i know this isnlt one of my best pieces, but I thought it was decent.
Please tell me what you think
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This is really good.. I love the way u put the words!
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i think this poem fares beautifully in the begining and the end...both lines make it superb!!
i also liked that u portrayed a certain side of this guy that might be
"Why can't you look me in the eyes or speak to me?
Are you putting on an act? Does it hurt you too?
Do you lay awake countless nights, hoping things will change?
Do you drink and drink and drink some more?"
some times some people just won't say anything and pretend like they don't care...this always makes them hurt you...coz u want to believe that they are putting on an act...but you wonder if they really don't care
gawd gurl
u write awesomely!!
Luv
VidZ
btw your page says you're 17...really?? -
Bravo
Nice. One of those that we can all relate to. I like how you payed attention to the sight of him bringing you down, instead of making you smile.
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Aw this is sad but beautifuly written ya know!!! I like
You break me down a little more each time I see you...
Because you can smile...when all I can do is sit here and cry.
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Beautifully written!
'Because you can smile...when all I can do is sit here and cry.'
I liked this line the most!
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hmm...this sounds like a break up when one is still hurt over it, and the other has moved on a bit too easily. that hurts, and is VERY sad
. thanks so much for your entry!
Rianna
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