You are so
Similar to a pretty girl
I once knew
But she wasn't as
Messed up as
You
Kiss me because you can
Hold my shaking hand
I'll promise not to be
Starry eyed
If you promise not to be
Amazing
Everything I thought I knew
I thought I knew it
Because you told me it was true
And things
Fell apart so perfectly
I believed you
Knew everything
I'll promise not to be
Starry eyed
If you promise not to be
Amazing
Tell me you love me
Just so I could hear it
Just once in my life
Give me a reason to live
Just so I could feel
A little real
I'll promise not to love you
I'll promise not to be
Little Starry eyed me
If you promise not to pretend
Like you love me
A contest entry
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500 points, ended May 10, 2007, 15 entries
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Comments
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This is very unique!
It's very sad though...in a way
I like the fact that this is realistic yet so emerged in pain and hurt from deep inside.
I'll promise not to be
Starry eyed
If you promise not to be
Amazing
Quite the promises I would say. It's very deep-especially that part. It has something deep within!!
Tell me you love me
Just so I could hear it
Just once in my life
Give me a reason to live
Just so I could feel
A little real
Dang, I love that part a lot. "Just once in my life give me the reason to live" Love is a big part of life and if you don't live with love...it's just gone, you're practically gone. "Just so I could feel a little real" Sometimes we just need to hear things to feel secure. And when we hear these things, the world seems right for mere moment.
Very nice write, I think this would sound great with a certain kind of melody!
Thank you so much for entering
~Poetrydove~
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Im starry eyed for your write. Nice flow. I'm amazed over this you really brought the feelings to the top. Good luck in the contest.
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very intruiguing write that is loving and tender yet filled with fear of the future and possible pain, well done! The flow is decent and this is a unique perspective, very realistic!
Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. 
Hetohke'e 
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this poem is really lovely in its own simplicity. really cool, woo!
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I like this style and the lyrics are really cool. It's simple but has a good meaning.
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i know where your coming from, i like this alot you should make it into a song
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actually. i made it into a song the other night
its awesome. cuz i play guitar
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i completely understand this and i can relate whole heartedly. i love this write quite a lot. =]
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