There hangs an old haggard sign
Illuminating a man walking the line
His body made from iron and dust
His eyes reflecting his mind's rust
He made it this far only with aid
Because his soul holds many debts unpaid
Along the line he moves slowly
Out sign which still glows dimly
How many lives did this hero save
Listening to other's maddened raves
Driving out to the coldest space
To wipe the tears from an innocent face
The darkness circles around this man
Walking the line, no foot prints in the sand
He was there when the gun blast shook
He was there when no one else would look
He never bowed to the hurricane's fury
He was never the one others had to bury
Survivng everything, the invincible creature
In his eyes there are many pictures
Of these terrible, lost, and insane
Few other eyes will see through this rain
As it pours around the man on the line
He has yet to stray away from here
Out of loyaly, not out of fear
Loyalty to those who were there before
Loyalty to those who ask for nothing more
Weary of pursing, always chasing
Weary of being second, always waiting
The line moves slowly to somewhere away
Quickly he follows for he cannot stray
For no matter how many times the line changes
He will follow, the line encages
This simple man with little heart
With its perfecting, a brilliant art
Walking along his beloved path
Its eyes turn away his frustrated wrath
So along he will walk, blindly following
To the place of dangerous beginnings
There is a wind coming from the west
As the arrows strike deep into his chest
Author notes
Alas for my rage, it matters little at the end. Sometimes I am sad it works better to write then for some reason.
Alas for you poor souls.
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good rhyme
One of the few examples I've seen lately of a really good, solid rhyme scheme. Excellent structure, too. I really enjoy your style of writing. It seems strong, yet sensitive, simple and understated, yet bold. I don't know how to put it really, but you have a unique poetic voice... one that is so clear I feel as though I know you and can almost hear you out loud. I think we all strive to achieve that. We all want to connect with our readers in such a way that we leave an impression on them. You have certainly done this with your work.
Well done, again.
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You once told me that my writings were the best outlet for all my pent up feelings, same goes for you. This is an awesome write. The imagery, the rhyme scheme, pure brilliance. Sad but beautiful.
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Thank you for your comment on my poem Family Album. I must say I love this, the flow and rhythm of it are wonderful. The subject is very intriguing and well expressed. Beautiful write, keep up the great work.
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I believe that for myself (in the past) I have been better able to write when I was upset because I have always been able to express my happiness outwardly and in other ways other than writing. It can be a great outlet for other emotions... Thank you for sharing...peace and light always in all ways, Kendal
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Wow, what powerful imagery. I'm just speechless... well done.
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wow
this is a really good one. i really saw everything. great, great job. thank you very much for this one
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