Alone in the black of night
searching for that glimpse of light
Growing cold with silent tears
Lost inside for all these years
Memories, now known as lies
conjure pain at no surprise
always was your heart so far
Distance fades your lonely star
Now with hollowed past behind
I realize how I was blind
Refusing to believe in fact
The strength of will I seemed to lack
Whispering within my ears
feeding my eternal fears
Memories, now known as lies
conjure pain at no surprise
always was your heart so far
Distance fades your lonely star
All that I asked
Was for your love returned
Then you removed your mask
how quickly I was burned
Hatred now consumes your soul
Degrading me, your only goal
You push me violently away
our trust we had, you now betray
Memories now waken cries
From our loves sudden demise
Forced to live with this new scar
from the depth of your black heart
Author notes
fear is only in our minds
song "your star" by evanescence
A contest entry
- Evanescence Inspired Dark Writes by Ktulu Blackwolfe.
525 points, ended May 12, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Avril, Jojo and Evanescence by XXbLAcKNAiLPoLisHXx.
300 points, ended August 21, 2007, 3 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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"Distance fades your lonely star"
Awesome..beautifully and brilliantly written
I am really impressed and will surely read this one again and again
Keep them comin!
Much Love!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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oh god oh wow this was so good!!!!
i liked all of the rhymes and it had amazing rhythm to it as well. i really liked this part
Whispering within my ears
feeding my eternal fears
anyways amazing poem....much much luck in the contest
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This is a great write
Very powerful and very emotional,
I felt the lyrics rolling off of tongue
And I enjoyed reading this brilliantly penned
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This was superb
This was a supurb write.
I like poems that tell a story. This story was great. I really relate to the hollowness inside the heart left by love scorned. I too have scars left by those I thought loved me. You should read some. Looking forward to seeing more writes like this.
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well i know why i like this poem..... because evanescence is AMAZING!!! and that was the best song on her new cd... sweet job!!!
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Glad you said you like Evanescence or then I really would have to kill you. I still love Bring me to Life, and Sweet Sacrifice. Oh and Lacrymosa, oh and Lithium, and...don't get me started lol.
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Evenescence does rock! But for all those fans...you should check out Within' Temptation...They've been around longer than Evanescence and so much better.
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very dark, very awesome
First of all, evanescence rocks, and you really did an awesome job portaying that inspiration...the imagery in this is outstanding, and the writing was extrememly powerful...it had me feeling sick at the end...i like it when poems do that...awesome!
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First off, Evanescence does totally rock. They are my all time favorite band. Thank you so much for your comment. I try my best to make my readers feel the emotion as best I can. I suppose I have that loss I told you about to thank for my true inspiration. Without that dark time and painful feeling I wouldn't have near as many words or inspiration for my poetry. I suppose I found the silver lining of that cloud. Again thank you, I really appreciate this.
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WOW that was amazing! The first verse and the second-last are the ones that struck me as the most powerful! Good luck in the contest!
Best wishes,
Laura
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You have done an awesome job with this title. I am impressed with the rhyming job too. Excellent write, thanks for entering and good luck.
**Ktulu Blackwolfe** -
Amy Lee would be proud of you! How you manage to produce such amazing writes will always astound me.
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That was the quickest stint of writers block in history. Perhaps you should call guinness, and write a book sharing your secrets.
That was also a mighty fine write, it had a nice flow, many parts rolled off your tongue (which always makes something a pleasure to read) and the message remained intact.
Very nice.
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This is powerful. Written with great intensity and heartache. The imagery is incredible. Can feel and see it clearly. Best of luck to you in the contest. This is worthy of recognition.
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