You have chained my emotions
Locked them down tight
Suffocating me with your dominance
I struggle to breathe
Metal cutting my skin
I fight to get free
My spirit withering away
As you sit and smirk
Knowing you have control
My wings of flight snipped from existence
In a list
A contest entry
- Picture inspiration. One picture, your words. TEN LINES OR LESS by Naridill.
300 points, ended May 7, 2007, 15 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This Should Have Won The Gold
This poem should have won the gold trophy. I really like it because I've been in this situation before. I know how it feels to be choked of your emotions. Anyway, as always, this is a verygood poem. Keep writing and I'll keep reading.
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deeply done with feelings
Lock down is an appropriate theme for this, as control, totally control, is similar to locked down.Well done with loads of feelings, unable to flee.
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You have described thi picture perfectly, I wonder why it only got HM. This is beautifully writted.
Love,
Amera
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A WONDERFUL POEM!
There are some out there who do try to keep us from being what we are capable of being, such a sad way but it does happen everyday.
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Wow
I loved this...Bookmark definately. Deep...very Deep!
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First, let me congratulate you on your trophy. This is a very beautiful write and you made it come to a very vivid image in my mind and for that I thank you for sharing it with me...
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Wow !!!
Your poem is wonderful. Awesome imagery. I kind of feel like this at times. Its hard not being with the one in your heart. Sometimes we can not control our hearts. Great picture. Best of luck in the contest.You take care, Blessings!!
Sandy 
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wow well done on this i love it its amazing the imagery within your words speak wonders...ohhh and the pic is outstanding too well done love xxx
laura xxx
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I liked this alot, my reason being that you have noted that there is no wings in the picture, as many failed to see. I really enjoyed reading this.
Thanks and well done.
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A bit frightening; lacks the eroticism I've come to feel from Soulful Woman
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Splendid, I would have never viewed it from this perspective and wow, how it turned out.Brilliant my gal..."My wings of flight snipped from existence" Stunning...good luck!
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