April storms bring lonely thoughts
-showers pouring, pouring in-
reminiscing of the past
reminding us of things that last
and things that never come again.
Raindrops fall in melancholy
Falling drop by drop
Falling, sliding, past each other
and joining in the slop.
Memories on my window,
sliding down the pane,
memories that beg to reason
what will come and come again.
April storms bring lonely thoughts
-showers pouring, pouring in-
reminiscing of the past
reminding us of things that last
and things that never come again.
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When I read this poem, I smiled and thought perhaps I was thinking of you in reply with this poem: http://allpoetry.com/poem/2507414
I like this poem a lot. Storms can have this affect on you.
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I guess I'm not the only one affected by those pesky storms.
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I love the repeating words and how it's a subtle compliment to the memory theme. This is a great piece that definitely captures how I felt during those 'April showers.' This is absolutely beautiful!
The only correction I have to make is *reminiscing, rather than 'reminessing', but that's minor. :]
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Thanks again!
I needed to fix that spelling error and I forgot. lol, I might be able to write, but sometimes I just can't spell.
Thanks again for reading!
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Wow you really get glum in the rain. Well great feeling in this poem I really loved it. But when I look at the rain I think of the good things it will bring like May flowers
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Almost There...
What I liked:
This was a deep, thoughtful poem that had me reflecting on memories and life. I also liked the rhyme structure, with the first and last stanzas being identical to each other. Also, I found it quite surprising that this was your least edited poem as I could only spot a few errors, which will be highlighted below.
Suggestions for Improvement:
-"...reminessing of the past..." (Line 3)
This should be spelled as "...reminiscing of the past..."
-"Raindrops fall in melancholy..." (Line 6)
There should be a comma after the word 'in'.
Overall Impression:
Thank you so much for putting up this piece! Again, the only visible mistakes I could find were very minor, so it came across as a shock to me that this was quite new. If you have anything else that needs to be commented on, just send me a message and I will take a look at it as soon as I can. Happy writing!
~HaloElite
PS: Check out my poems "The Cockroach" and "Hadrian's Wall"! They're the first two poems I've ever written (I am not a very experienced poet), but feel free to comment on them anytime!
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