Sea of sound
motionless
compound
grazing sunset
gazing clouds
she takes her teddy
the only thing she has
she thinks nothing of it
as she throws it into
the air above it *splash*
the sea swallows
as she walks
as she talks to
her spirt
lays down
and falls....
Author notes
OMG! Earthquake! duck n'cover!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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here is something for you that I forgot.
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I like this. my kind of poem and I can't pick just one line as a favorite, because I loved all of it. excellent job on writing this..
good luck in the contest.
kat -
Beautiful write I like it
Thank you for entering into my contest I wish you the best of luck
Redwing Spirit
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lol
Lovely poem here! But commas and periods may be needed in some places, mmmk? I still like the poem though! -
"she things nothing of it"
You may mean; "think" in the above line.
This poem seems very personal, almost as if the subject is releasing herself from the past. Well written. Thank you for this entry into my contest. I wish you well.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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this is a good write. kinda confusing in some parts to me but hey! that could just be me...since I am naturally blonde!! haha. what choice did you choose?? great write and I wish you luck!!!
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i think it was cute and i did like it
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