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qu'elle me prenne mon âme pour un tour
qu'elle me serve d'aide, de miracle, de roue de secours
qu'elle m'entraine à valvolo,loin de tous ces vautours
qu'elle me hisse un rempart de protection hérissé de tours

et...

que je lui touche du bout des doigts la tiédeur du poignet
que je m'ennivre de ses senteurs m'enflammant les sens sans arrêt
que je m'enfonce avec rage dans la passion de ses yeux bigarrés
que je l'aime un peu,beaucoup,passionnement,a la folie,sans arrêt

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  • electrastar
    May 9, 2007

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    wow!

    now seriously do u need my opinion on that!! hehe it's simply beautiful... and trust me babe the message has been delivered, only this time i don't think u'll b waiting 4 any reply... mwah i luv u!!


    • sarajevo
      May 12, 2007
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      thanks a lot sweety..you're probably right but i had to do it anyways...
      i love you 2
      MMWAH !


  • N0sferatu
    May 7, 2007

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    En francais, devant toi et devant tes idées, je me considere comme un analphabete mon ami.
    Amazing emotions and images.

    Elie


  • psychokid
    May 6, 2007

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    really, am not kidding, ur french just blows me off.
    i dont know how, but ur choice of words, is just "impequable".

    que je l'aime un peu,beaucoup,passionnement,a la folie,sans arrêt

    and another thg, u always keeps waiting for the next line, u captive the reader .
    excellent job

    peace.


  • XFaLLen-StarX
    May 6, 2007

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    and that's when i know that some things are worth waitin for !! ..
    usually i lose intrest when i wait.. but wid ur pieces its different .. very different ..
    as ranz said 'u never cease to amaze me' .. nd oh shes quotin u in ur last piece "like a stone" lol ..

    loved it!! really..

    me..
    xxx


  • bloodflower
    May 6, 2007
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    Magical...
    I loved!!


  • Apsinthion
    May 6, 2007

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    seriously.. and im quoting this frm sum1 bass nsit mean.. u NEVER cease to amaze me..
    and like hana said, there's really sthg bout u n french poetry that is just totally mindblowing!

    ur words.. omg serge! they take me to a whole other dimension..

    n i love it when i know wut ur talkin bout heh! or i think that i knw.. well.. anyhoo!
    this was magical.



    ~rana~




  • O b l i v i o n
    May 6, 2007

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    i dont know really..
    but there's something about you, and french poetry, and the amazing images you paint...

    this amazing tenderness...and fragility and magic that i just cannot explain...

    i dont know if these are wishes...or dreams...or deep yearnings...or even oaths...but the beauty of them is just euh well...amazing

    MWAAAAAAAH!


  • Nour Beydoun
    May 6, 2007
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    Woo.. I need a drink..
    brilliant.. I'm glad you're writing.. I'm glad I'm reading..

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