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when all our doves leave us...

 

 



meet me with the face
you had before you were born,
for I’ll recognize even the shadow
of your name on a plain of mist.

I, again, will break the bread
of light in your eyes, and simply be
chalice and wine.  in your throat,
softly, a dove will groan - you

whose hands have tasted
little of the good earth
of a woman.

between us a flower

will open,

and you’ll understand

how many amaranthine moons
a single arum unfolds

 

 

 

 

 

 



 

Author notes

“I will meet you where nothing dies” – Zen Koan

Amaranthine = Eternally beautiful and unfading; everlasting


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  • Peteskid gold member
    February 28
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    Remarkable...an experience... PK


  • Heart Sutra
    February 20

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    Of course this is gorgeous and perfect! Definitely I will read this one!


  • Cat gold member
    December 28, 2007

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    i can see why this has garnered so much praise and so many accolades- it is lovely- truly lovely


    m


  • Lute
    December 27, 2007

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    content 7.8
    vocabulary 11.5
    accuracy 7.8
    creativity 7.5
    theme 7.4
    originality 7.25

    totals-49.25


    • Nicolette gold member
      January 9, 2008
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      Thanks, Lute - you've done a great job with this contest

  • Rowan gold member
    October 9, 2007

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    It all works~ beyond words.


  • Asfand
    September 22, 2007
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    oh my !! this is exotic and precious!!


  • Namita
    September 17, 2007

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    Excellent. Fantastic write. Just too beautiful. Too much for my heart.

    Candy


  • Dienush
    September 10, 2007

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    Hmm. I can see that in this poem, though I've seen it in some other poems of yours too. You know I really like this poem, I think it's one of the strongest or the strongest you've ever written. Otherwise I've done most of the commenting on this one. Thank you for entering.


  • Coelogyne
    August 23, 2007
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    Fantastic

    i quite like this piece.. it soothed me and made me calm while reading...very nice write


  • sarajaneUK
    August 19, 2007

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    What a superb write, the first two lines especially will stay in my mind for a very long time. Most excellent.


    • Nicolette gold member
      August 19, 2007
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      Thank you for reading and for the lovely comment, sarajane


  • Diablosanjil
    August 16, 2007

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    Kudos!!! I will give you lots of praise, this piece is so beautifully written. i can only imagine the images in this piece. you did a great job on this.
    between us a flower will open,

    and you’ll understand how many
    amaranthine moons
    a single arum unfolds
    I love this. It really brings the whole piece together i think.. anyway Keep writing dear friend!!1
    poeticanjil


  • marc creamore
    August 15, 2007

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    Hi Nic . . . its me again for a third time . . . this writing must be published in book form for I am getting somewhat greedy and want to hold all of your words collected in one place.


    • Nicolette gold member
      August 16, 2007
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      Hi Marc... thank you so much. I'm working on getting published...maybe early next year

  • marc creamore
    August 15, 2007
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    Nicolette . . . this one actually caused my eyes to mist up. This has to be one of the most beautiful and emotionally gratifying pieces of poetry I have ever read . . . I am printing this off immediately because I want my wife Donna to read it . . . You have a huge fan up here in Vancouver, Canada . . . I am mesmerized by the stunning beauty of your work . . . love Marc


  • Keikou Tenshin
    August 15, 2007
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    Wow, I loved this! 'Tis one of the few poems that made me say "Squeeee!" Alright, great one~


  • daeste
    August 15, 2007

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    Exceptional

    This is so well worded and flows so smoothly. Free verse in some ways is the hardest I think to write yet at the same time when one has accomplished it, it is also the most rewarding. Allowing us a much broader range to express ourselves. Great Job. Loved it.

  • rvh1956
    August 15, 2007

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    Exactly

    The poem here to me gave a sense of something more than the words could express. The wording is current, yet the meaning is timeless. So without further ado:

    There was a boy so full of joy
    In every moment he was glad
    The things he forgot
    Were things that caught
    And drove him
    Into being
    Mad.

    Blessed was he
    His spirit was free
    Problems he had were few
    When he questioned these things
    It brought to him things
    This boy wishes
    He never knew.

    This is a song
    Go not where you don't belong
    Be in your way strong
    Here in you is where you are all along.

    Hope this finds you in a moment of grace
    May these words bring a smile to your face
    Be calm in yourself
    Let those things be on the shelf
    Let your song from you
    All pain erase.

    Thank you,

    Rich.

    • Nicolette gold member
      August 16, 2007
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      Rich, thank you very much. Yes, this poem was an attempt to expess something that was almost bigger than words. Thank you for the lyrics too - especially the last stanza...

      • rvh1956
        August 16, 2007
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        You're welcome.

        Nic, you are a much better poet than I. I am just a troubador waiting for the next train somewhere. Should feel so moved to continue this, please IM here.

        Rich.


  • Tirrell
    August 15, 2007
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    beautiful imagry.


  • requiempoet gold member
    August 15, 2007
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    Heavy. Wow. You certainly deserved the gold!!! congrats poet!


  • Cerridweneyes
    August 15, 2007

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    absolutely gorgeous! Your talent for words and the power of metaphor is exceptional! This is the second poem of yours ive read and Im already hooked

  • dreamcusp
    August 15, 2007
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    beautiful.


  • PageTurner
    August 15, 2007

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    A Work of ART!!!

    Such a vivid and precious poem this is! The sensitivity and emotions of each line are overwhelming. The outpouring of deep seeded emotions and your descriptive mastery was captivating. You actually took my breath away, Nic!

    "between us a flower will open,

    and you’ll understand how many
    amaranthine moons
    a single arum unfolds"

    ...Sighhh. GOLDEN!

    Soul Touching, Nic!
    ~ Nicholas


  • Darkend
    August 15, 2007

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    Beautiful

    One word: Ethreal...it was like a fine lace that whispers over skin and provokes lightness, happiness. It was simply wonderful...thank you for writing it.

  • TerryColvin
    August 15, 2007

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    I am so impressed with this write. It brings true joy to my heart and soul. The beauty of this sparks a light in my soul. Yet there's an innocents of a better day and another time. This poem has truely made my day. So very powerful. Thank you.

  • marc creamore
    May 25, 2007
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    Nicolette . . . I am so moved by the perfection of this piece . . . it's beauty almost misted up my eyes . . . believe me when I say that the response of my inner be-ing to this write is overwhelming . . . it is simply one of the most beautifully worded poems I have ever read . . . I AM IN AWE!!!!!!!

  • mimiagatha
    May 18, 2007

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    those motifs dear to you - doves, exotic flowers... and those motifs dear to me - bread, earth, woman... what a beautiful poem of longing and want and hope. so glad to see your special touch back, nicolette


  • Jettison
    May 17, 2007
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    Congrats on the gold, it was definitely deserved.

    I love how some people are almost built into you. You could hear them breathing from across a room or see a flash of their nail polish and know without a doubt it was them.

    I think life is better when you have someone like this.
    And also poetry like this, but that's a whole different comment.


    • Nicolette gold member
      May 17, 2007
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      Yes, life is definately better....loved your comment about "some people being built into you" - thank you

  • Heart Sutra
    May 16, 2007
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    Well, you know that your beauty shines through every word. This poem is just lovely and goregous. I like the unique word choices too.

    • Nicolette gold member
      May 17, 2007
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      Thank you, Zayra.... It was such a wonderful quote to work with. The quality of your contests says so much of your beauty too


  • nolove20insight
    May 13, 2007
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    very good...i like your style


  • AJ Morelli gold member
    May 13, 2007
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    a very strong piece in the contest, this is wonderful...


    al

  • Slashes of Color
    May 13, 2007

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    This was beautiful. Soft and gentle words, that just flowed wonderfully. This is definitly one of the best I've read!!!


    • Nicolette gold member
      May 13, 2007
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      Thank you, ellebelle...your comment planted in a smile in my eyes


  • Dalaney gold member
    May 12, 2007

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    I can see why this poem is so
    popular with the readers on
    this site...it is breathtaking,
    beautifully written, softly
    felt by this reader...

    Love, Lane


    • Nicolette gold member
      May 12, 2007
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      Thank you, Lane...that was what I wanted the reader to feel...


  • Shirley Shaw
    May 11, 2007

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    Excellent Poem,Indeed

    Dear Nicolette;
    I Really Enjoyed This Poem Of Yours. I've Not Been On As Much Lately, And I've Really Been Missing Some Good Work.'Loved It' !!! Very Deep And Emotional Write. My Kinda Poem.'God Bless You Always'.Love, Shirley ann shaw-Raytown,mo.64133..................


    • Nicolette gold member
      May 12, 2007
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      Shirley, thank you so much - and so great to see you again (don't stay away too long...).


  • AgeofAquarius
    May 10, 2007

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    Beautiful flow from a gifted soul...

    I’ll recognize even the shadow
    of your name on a plain of mist.

    I, again, will break the bread
    of light in your eyes, and simply be
    chalice and wine. in your throat,
    softly, a dove will groan - you

    The purpose of a name is beautifully honored in this Nicolette. As always a gentle flowing breeze.

    We are known by our name but knowing someone and KNOWing someone is two different things entirely.
    We can make assumptions by who we think they are and be totally wrong if we cannot SEE them through our heart and eyes of loving kindness.

    The plain of mist reminds me of the tender embrace of the mist (fog) that sweeps gently, quietly through the trees in the Sierra's when the marine layer sneaks through the gorgeous trees of Pac rim area.

    Loved the name of this contest " where nothing ever dies", in nature nothing does.It just becomes part of the greater whole.

    industrialization and manifest destiny encroaches upon that in the name of progress.

    I lived near Santa Barbara area near the painted cave fires area where developers built house to crowd nature for big money.

    The fire storms that raged through there were because it had been inconvenient for men to remove the undergrowth. Yet nature took its toll upon those who had resisted.

    Now the place will look gorgeous I'm sure when I get a chance to see it soon.


    Namaste Sweet spiritual lady.



    PS Loved the grafic too. ;o)


    • Nicolette gold member
      May 10, 2007
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      Thank you so much...such a beautiful comment. It's wonderful to see that someone took the time to read into a poem...Many blessings


  • truembrace
    May 10, 2007

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    so many visions of blossoms opening here - through verses, through metaphor...

    the calla as such a symbol for me personally that is often used for weddings or reverence, so I would imagine longevity in their blossoms that run through their perfect white swathe that I imagine from this piece. this poem leaves me with imagining how they bud so demurely coming out of their long green stems and becoming that shape of an elegant flute that cannot help but be noticed. they are simply gorgeous flowers...

    the flowers opening between two in this piece - there is such a temperment across flowers. had you written of roses, that some should open so quickly in summer heat and not endure or wait as this poem suggests. Here, the calla endures and I picture the opening slow and knowing, as in learning of a new lover, a new hope, the patience to wait...

    stunning...

    • Nicolette gold member
      May 10, 2007
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      Thank you, Kim, for a wonderful comment - of course that fine poetic eye of yours could see right into the heart of this calla unfolding. The calla is a symbol for me personally too and often I think of it as an "earth" moon that never wanes.


  • Oisin silver member
    May 9, 2007

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    Words of a never fading touch, something that returns with each new season,

    wonderful,

    If you have found that you are among only a few........


    • Nicolette gold member
      May 10, 2007
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      Thank you, my friend...you understood what I wanted to say...


  • Candy6
    May 9, 2007
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    Beautiful

    yeah the rose does unfolds.....


  • Ladybug
    May 7, 2007

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    just like a rose unfolding...

    this is precious!!


    Tamara


  • kaibab silver member
    May 7, 2007

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    Beautiful y6ou prolific poetess...such a wpiritual ride to love's giant ocean...I am mending my sail to raise in wave...a raft is bound to gather spla in sending ever more applause


  • leander Moderators member
    May 7, 2007

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    It's simply remarkable, the way you let your pen dance with words and reflect the rhythm upon the reader's eyes...


  • inder silver member
    May 7, 2007
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    Drunk!!!

  • Son of Jim
    May 6, 2007

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    A flowers, the flowers, how they tie nature and our lives and can symbolize so much, the imagery they bring to a well written poem is outstanding.
    This poem has an ethereal feel, and why shouldn't it, the references are deeply spiritual. Shadow in the mist, oh, how to capture those two. Love can be this elusive.
    The chalice and break bread are powerful words, coupled with the rest of your complex language is so well done. Thanks for sharing and good luck.
    Jim


  • Cannonsfire
    May 6, 2007

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    This is such a deep and metaphorical look of life and love, softly whispered from your pen. It is truly beautiful. Love, C

  • tara wilson gold member
    May 6, 2007

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    Oh, what lovely poetry you write, so soft and wispy, I love these lines:
    whose hands have tasted
    little of the good earth
    of a woman.
    Is is very graceful and elegant, Wanda always has the best words for it, lol, a beautiful poem!


  • Night Hope gold member
    May 6, 2007

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    "you

    whose hands have tasted
    little of the good earth
    of a woman.

    between us a flower will open"

    Sighhh...Such graceful elegance & acceptance of Truth in these lines, my dear Friend...What a brilliant & lovely penning this is...Good luck in Zayra's contest, Sweetie...


  • natari
    May 6, 2007

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    breath taking and the opening stanza made me ache for those i miss.you have penned another powerful flawless poem.the imagery is very colurful too.lovely write.
    ~h


  • klassy lassy
    May 6, 2007

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    Eternity would be like this, forever unfolding the essence of life which knows only that which belongs to sustenance and the truth of it's nature, where individualty is never lessened, but enhanced in the blooming vibrance of one soul touching another and the knowlege that it has always been so. I have no words, Nicolette, for the feeling this leaves with me, except that you are a poet extraordinaire!


  • Nicolette Everett
    May 6, 2007

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    Unique

    Definitly unique for sure. I like the words you used, they were beautiful. And I like how you used a word that a lot of people don't know. The poem was really good, hope you do good on the contest.


  • Drevin Revlocke
    May 6, 2007
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    I had to go to m-w.com for this one, haha. Very beautiful, and sensual. I love the lines:

    "I, again, will break the bread
    of light in your eyes, and simply be
    chalice and wine. in your throat
    softly, a dove will groan - you"

    That line is just so.. perfect? Haha, no other way of putting it. Beautiful write

  • PalmettoSky
    May 6, 2007

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    very mystical and romantic in notion...This is the stuff true romantic poetry is made of. great job poet! keep those words flowing. good job! peace and light, KP


  • Spiritvision angel
    May 6, 2007

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    "meet me with the face
    you had before you were born,
    for i'll reconize even the shadow
    of your name on a plain of mist." Beautiful beyond words with a elegance to the words.
    "between us a flower will open,
    and you'll understand how many
    amaranthine moons
    a single arum untolds"
    This has a heaven touch to it as i read and am filled with peacefulness. Thank you for sharing this.


  • misselaineous
    May 6, 2007
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    this is beautifully written, soft, sensual and honest


  • storiesuntold gold member
    May 6, 2007
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    beautiful write here a very lasting read


  • masterblaster gold member
    May 6, 2007

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    Hi, as usual a very lovely poem from you, always a pleasure to read your work, all the best in the comp you have set the bar very high,Di

  • Dienush
    May 6, 2007
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    Wow, you know I generally really like your poetry, but this is even better than most of your others, in my opinion. There are some images here so nice I felt the need to stop reading the poem to reread those lines. For example, "n your throat,
    softly, a dove will groan" is so vivid, I could not only envision it, but I could also feel every sensation it brings. Same goes for "between us a flower will open", which to me sounds like a very delicate way of symbolizing giving birth to or concieving a child, spreading life through love. That last stanzas is a great ending to this poem, because it conveys beatitude very well. And now, to my my incoherence even clearer, I forgot to mention how impressive I found the beginning, as it seems to allude to one's real identity that they had before being given an actual name or label. Okay, enough of my ramblings now I just really loved this a lot.

    ~Diana

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    May 6, 2007

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    The reader was captivated within the first two lines and felt the "ahhh" factor with all it's finesse,the captivation continued,prompting eyes to mist with tears at the intrinsic beauty,if you were a surgeon and not a poetess you would perform open heart surgery and leave not a scar but a place of healing,a trophy cabinet within the self,I adore your ability to plummet depths of emotion and then lift the piece gently and beautifully,the skill within your fingertips spreads heart-sighs and heart-smiles,I shall stop rambling and simply bow,applaud and appreciate reading very,very much

  • Peteskid gold member
    May 6, 2007

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    Lovely

    a timeless sense of wanting spoken in a language defiant of endings, telling of beginnings and wonderful joy... Just lovely...PK

  • Rowan gold member
    May 6, 2007
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    ..wow. I was always in awe of your talent, this is why.
    Simply stirring, and brilliant.


    • Nicolette gold member
      May 6, 2007
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      Thank you, Kathleen... I had to bring my doves in somewhere...

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