Upon this earth, my sadness to ponder,
darkness obscures the light.
Only left are memories to wander,
mid the darkening night.
In to my heart, delves the depths of despair,
let sorrow overflow.
Unsurmountable were the mountains there,
barren valley lay below.
Shadows of yesterday still seem so real,
oh moonlight hear me weep.
Release me from this hurt I now feel,
within this grayness creep.
Alone in solitude, my captivity,
cold wind feels so daunting.
No solace to be found to comfort me,
thoughts become so haunting.
In a list
A contest entry
- Picture Inspired Dark Poerty by ennovy.
550 points, ended May 20, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is such a sad poem. I hope it was just inspired by the picture and not how you're actually feeling. I liked the use of rhyme here, you're one of my favourite rhyming poets actually I liked the use of alliteration here, for example, 'delves...depths...despair'.
Thanks for your comment
Good luck in the contest
Your friend
Pozo
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Thank You Pozo!!!
Your comment was so nice. Thank you. I was inspired by the picture but it is easy for me to draw on some sad times in my life too. But I am a survivor.
No need to worry. My faith gets me through alot. You take care my friend.Always so nice to hear from you.
God Bless You,
Love you, Sandy
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ur poem
really captures bleakness i love it very moving -
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Great Comment
Hello, Thank you for stopping by and reading. I appreciate your nice comment.
You take care, Sandy .
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u have a good day ,god bless
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omg...i can relate to this somewhat!...hey mom its been a long time i havent checked your work but its still good as it was before
hope you doing great...
lovely piece here especially when i am going through same emotions
keep going
A
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Beautiful Comment
Hello Ankeeta, Thank you for the lovely comment. So nice to hear from you. I hope things get better for you. You take care, Bless you, Mom
Many Hugs and Smiles !!!
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Boldly Penned ~
Depth throughout this write captured me
from the start ~
I saw this picture of Novys, and said....no...I can't
write anything about it....but you sure did ~
Each stanza is very powerful & full of delicious
imagery to startle my senses ~
Barren valleys,
shadows of yesterday,
moonlight hear me weep,
cold winds so daunting.........
very nicely done my Dear ~
The best to you in this contest ~
Bear ~
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Wonderful Comment!!!
Hello dear Bear, Your comment was wonderful dear friend. I so appreciate your thoughts about my poetry. It is always an honor to know you enjoyed reading my poem. Thank you so much for reading this one. You have a wonderful evening. Many hugs. Bless you always my friend!!
Sandy
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hi my lovely auntie
An amazing piece here. I was busy in the last 2-3 days and missed your nice poems.
Wish you luck in the contest.
Shahrzad
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the emotions here are strong:
Shadows of yesterday still seem so real,
oh moonlight hear me weep.
Release me from this hurt I now feel,
within this grayness creep.
the reader can feel the heartache. well written. you did an excellent job with this! keep writing! God bless you always
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Good Morning Sis!!!!
Hello my friend, I hope you are resting like you are suppose too. You take care of yourself.
Thank you for reading my poem and leaving a nice comment. Been in a down mood lately but nothing to worry about. Just need to get over a few things in my life and writing helps.
God Bless you,
Sandy
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This was truly a dark piece. The feelings of despair are so apparent..I dont remember ever reading anything from you like this before..so it is a change.
Well done, my friend.
Good luck in the contest.
Soulful Woman
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Great Comment
Thank you so much for the lovely comment. Always nice to hear from you. Take care, Sandy
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well done
very nice personification. i also enjoyed the alliteration and imagery. thank you.
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Nice Comment
Your comment was most appreciated. Thank you for stopping by. Take care, Sandy
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Amazing Concept of the Picture
Thank you for entering my contest. Your rhyme enhanced your skills and your unique insight on the picture............ totally enjoyable....novy
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Great Comment
Your comment is most appreciated. Thank You. Take care,
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very good
I can feel the sadness in this and the loneliness in this
This is very well done i think it goes well with the picture. Good luck in your contest -
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Nice Comment!!!
Hello Ricky, Thank you for stopping by and leaving a nice comment. I so appreciate it. You take care, Sandy
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Beautiful
Absolutely perfect flow rhyme and meter. The poem content was delivered with vivid imagery taht conveyed the profound sadness I you intended. Very nicely done and this should be a winner! Good luck, Rhon
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Hmmmm
A very nice connection with nature, gives us a thought on what our surroundings may be feeling. Or atleast what we may be feeling for them.
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now that is dark, making my effigy of passion seem light hearted. Nicely done!!!
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Great Comment!!!
Hello Titus, I so appreciate you stopping by. Your comment was so nice. I also appreciate your thoughts on my poems. You are such a talent yourself. It is an honor to have you leave this nice comment. Take care, Sandy
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Hello Titus, Thank you for stopping by and reading omy poem. It is always so nice to hear from you. *hug*
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Beautiful
The one who watches in the darkness you can never tell what they may really see
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Great Comment!!!!
Hello, Thank you so much for the lovely comment. Always nice to hear from you. Take care, Sandy
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The emotion is literally pulsating off the screen
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Lovely Comment!!!
Good Morning. Thank you so much for the lovely comment. It is so appreciated. Always nice to hear from you. Take care, Sandy
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