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Worn jeans and a leather belt

Worn jeans and a leather belt,
A striped shirt and a cream silk cardigan.
A maroon woollen waistcoat.
Flip flops.

Is that all you see?

Or can you see the person I am?

Can you see the person who loves you with their whole heart?

Tell me you can.

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Just transferring thoughts

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  • Ravenblood
    June 14, 2007
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    YAY for transfering thoughts. lol. i love to do that. just putting all the thoughts onto a page and seeing wahts comes out.
    very kewl as
    and you know something random.. here in AU flip-flops are called thongs.. and the naughty thongs are called G-Strings.

    lol xoxo

    Claire-Anne


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    June 14, 2007

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    So you wear flip flops too!! Shows unwillingness to conform, preferring to be an individual. At least for me it does. This also asks to be accepted for who you are inside, which is the way it should be. Great write.

    Jeannie


  • kennethlaney
    June 14, 2007

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    I tend to specialize in rhyme "CELTESS" but I also can appreciate any poetry that makes sense to me. This poem gives me a very good idea of the "Intent of content". Which is to say that I can visualize a person dressed as you described, trying to find out how her loved one truel feels towards her.I feel that it is a good poem! I just signed on for the first time yesterday and am just a baby at this! I hope that I am Proceding down the right road! Thanks for your criticism! Will possible hear from you again.
    "BOO"


  • Tconi
    May 7, 2007
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    BEAUTIFUL just BEAUTIFUL

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