I am your dream
your consciousness stream
in every shining sunbeam
you will see me
in the lowest valley
atop the highest peak
if you look you will find me
I am your dream
with every fallen leaf
you will remember me
forever I will be
in your memory
in a morning's sunrise
my loves radiance
shall light the sky
find the truth in my eyes
for dreams do not lie
when you wake
you will discover me
in every shining sunbeam
in your consciousness stream
I am your dream.
A contest entry
- Picture Inspired Dark Poerty by ennovy.
550 points, ended May 20, 2007, 12 entries
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Very odd rhyme scheme ...
but it seems to work.
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I really love the flow of this, how the lines are staggered in length... I am your dream, your consciousness stream... Beautiful.
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Thank you very much.
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I wish you would have stayed with one rhyme scheme...It seems here there and not purposful...Not really a big fan sorry.
The imagry is nice though...But it almost seems like you gave up on the rhyme you chose each time
Good job though.
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lovely and flows so nicely. The repetitive "dream" throughout your piece made it feel different and takes the ready into, shall I say it. A dream ~ winks & waves - Myke
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Thank you. I'm glad you liked it.
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Nice
very nicely done. great flow as well
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Beautiful Expression
Thank you for entering my contest,and your unique insight on the picture, great repition, and concept............novy
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I enjoyed it. Thanx.
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Wonderful!
This is a lovely poem...not dark to me...
It is dream like and feels like a cherished memory to me. Jane
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Thank you.
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