I just can't stop thinking
about you...it's true
I am stuck on you
When I first saw you
I just knew it was true
why yes, I do love you
I wounder if he knows
he is all I think about at night
I don't like this fight
Just let me go
Just let me know
If you ever loved me too??
Author notes
not done yet but read if you want and tell me what you think...please
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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i like this ALOT!
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I loved the feel of this, its kind of ironic when all it takes is to look at one person and completely hooked on them. I definetly understand where your coming from.
I'll definitely watch out for the finished version!
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Like the feel of this poem. Its a really nice 'thoughts of a teenage girl' type poem. Second stanza could be worked on a bit maybe
'When I first saw you
I thought it was true
Love at first sight with you'
Or something like that. Lets your mind go blank then put yourself in this unrequited love situation.
Great start, let me know when its done as I would love to read the ful version!!
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This is sweet. I really like it. It's funny how one person can consume your every thought so much that it basically tortures you. I've been there before, actually I'm pretty much always like that. Things would be easier if we knew what others were thinking. Great Write. I'll have to read it when you're finished with it.
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