If I said I was ok
I would be lieing
Your everywhere I look
Your everything I think about
If I could I would
But I dont think I can
You told me not to
Or you would hit again
If I said I loved you
who knows what would happen
you might do it to me again
you might make me bleed this time, again
I hate when your friends come over
what you all do to me
taking the best of me
Please dad...
it hurts
can't you tell when you hear me scream
or do you hear me scream??
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This is very sad. Its so full of pain and emotion, such a terrible situation to be in. A few grammatical errors but they don't take anything away from the poem so who cares. Great Write.
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It's a nice poem but I think some corrections need to be made.. In the 2nd and 3rd lines is it 'Your' or 'You are'? Well I did not understand the poem that very well but from what I understood, it's dedicated to a dad who's loved a lot by his child but does not retaliate it.. The title 'WHY' looks apppropriate for the poem..
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