How I finally got you I'll never know,
But I'll try not to let this heartache show.
I'm looking back on you and me,
And wondering how I lost you so quickly.
I've cried and cried countless nights,
Contemplating on how to make things right.
You made me so happy....I can't forget,
But no matter what I won't regret.
I said I loved you and I knew it was true,
I love you still even though we're through.
I won't regret the time we shared,
I won't forget that at one point you cared.
I felt so safe when I laid in your arms,
Like you'd always protect me from all harm.
You made me laugh like no other could,
And you left me for words misunderstood.
Though I'm hurting now, I know it was all worth while,
Because before you caused these tears...you made me smile
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"Never regret anything that ever made you smile."
-Spiritvision angel
My boyfriend recently broke up with me, and I was crushed...I would have given my world to be with him, he was everything to me....he'll never get it....
Please tell me what you think
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so heartbreaking.Break ups are always so hard.You expressed your pain with the greatest of care.My heart goes out to you.To express one's pain is truely hard but you made it look easy.Always remember the times that you had and give thanks for the time that you did have together.Sometimes things just won't work out the way you want them to.
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Really well written, especially the way you ended the piece. I liked it, good work.
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i went through oen relationship like that too...there was just so much to feel for him... i actually got interested in your work coz it reminded me a lot of him... the quote about wanting to smile coz he's your friend...and wantin got cry coz that's all he'll ever be...
we went around for about 3 months...my first real relationship...i lost my virginity to this guy...he was evrything i ever wanted...and then he cheated on me...and i tried to talk it out...he told me he wanted me in his life but only as a friend....and he wanted me in his life so badly that i actually stuck around for him about 6 months after we broke up.....the way i have cried...and begged him to take me back....only i know the limits to which i have stooped below my self esteem...eventually i just told him that he's gonna have to do it without me... i ain't gonna waste my life over a realationship that has nothing in it for me... haven't spoken to him for over 2 months now... happy and chirpy all over again.....i don't regret the time i was dating him...but i do regret the time i stuck around for no reason...that naver made me smile...!!
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VidZ
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Very lovely feelings. Realistic.
Thank you for entering,
Best of luck!
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Nice touch on the last line - using the three dots. That works really well, it gives the reader the idea that you have paused, that you have sighed.
I gather this is deeply personal - it shows, brave rhyme scheme. I liked it, good luck in the contest.
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