Sunsets by freespirit51 at All poetry

Bright

colors

begin the

evening sunset

Pink and purple hues

shine through impending twilight

glorious is nature’s night

each sunset unique

Surrendered now

forever

to be

solemn

memories

once here then gone

Here only moments

still some never forgotten

lasting visions begotten

on nature’s easel

Tonight’s complete

tomorrow

starts once

more

Author notes

Arkquain Swirl* This Form will allow you to connect your *Arkquain* Forms by elliminating one of the ( 1 ) syllable lines, therefore, the syllable count on this certain piece is:
1-2-3-4
5-7-7-5
4-3-2-1-2-3-4
5-7-7-5
4-3-2-1
As always, the two ( 7 ) syllable lines within each individual *Arkquain* MUST rhyme ~ You have now created a *Swirl* The number of *Arkquain* Forms you choose to place together to create your *Swirl* is up to you ~ This will get tricky if you are half asleep or not paying attention to syllable count ~

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A contest entry

*~ Poetry Formed VI ~* by Arkbear. 875 points, ended May 23, 2007, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

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Arkbear
May 22, 2007

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A Most Beautiful Theme ~

However....

I am going to deduct serious points

for stucture and aesthetic eye appeal ~

Perfect syllable count though ~

Flow was not bad at all...

..I thought it was rather good ~

The Theme is splendid ~

The imagery is breathtaking ~

But.....

you have got to work on your FORM!!!!

The Arkquain is ART!!

Just like a Lanturne,

a Cinquain,

a Rictameter,

or a Haiku',

the Arkquain was created for t

he beauty of its' FORM!!

Line 1, is actually overlapping line 2 ~

Lines, 6, 9, 15, 16, 19 & 21 are no where near lining

up for the structures eye appeal ~

As it says in the rules....

Aesthetic appeal is 75% of your score ~

Nice Swirl, but fell way short in

Aesthetic presentation ~

( - 1.0 pts. )

SCORE: 9.0

SMILE!!

Your efforts show!

Another chance at BIG pts. in the next contest ~

Winner takes all!

Bear ~
joyya
May 10, 2007

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I like this, beautiful sunset. My favorite times of the day are sunrise and sunset. Love the form. Very nice flow. I had a little stumble with lines two and three - "colors begins the" - think it would have better grammer if an "s" was removed from one or the other. "color begins" or "colors begin" just a thought. Love this write a lot.
- freespirit51
  May 10, 2007
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  Thanks for your wonderful comment. I am glad you found it to your liking. It always amazes me on how beautiful this time can be.
freespirit51
May 7, 2007
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Thanks so much for the wonderful comment. I enjoyed the challenge of the write myself.
Lady-Pegasus
May 7, 2007

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Interesting piece to be certain, nice flow to it, hehe I loved the last line in your notes, hehe I have mearned about doing ne thing on here in that condition, hehe i tried judging a contest once way late at night, was not pretty sight! Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e
- freespirit51
  May 7, 2007
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  Thanks for the great comment. I am glad you enjoyed it.
deleteit
May 6, 2007

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A beautiful poem to say the least! I love the canvas of the sky as twilight approaches and you captured the beauty so well in these words! Best of luck in the contest
Spiritvision angel
May 6, 2007

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Images of colorful delights that seem to be a gift to each of us to see if only we take the time to do so. Each beauitful in their own way. wonderful write with a promise of knowing tomorrow holds yet another colorful delight. Thanks for sharing this .
- freespirit51
  May 7, 2007
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  Thanks so much for your wonderful comment . I am glad you enjoyed it.
Whispering Wind
May 6, 2007

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BREATH TAKING
My sister you have painted a most wonderful picture with your words...even though I couldn't be there you have taken me with you with your words...All the wonderful glory of a sunset never to be seen again...each different in its on way thank you so much for sharing
- freespirit51
  May 6, 2007
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  Thanks My Sister for your wonderful and inspiring words. Glad you enjoyed the piece as much as i did.
Trueheartforlife
May 6, 2007

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Great
This poem was great it painted such a vivid picture. My favorite part was:

Here only moments

still some never forgotten

lasting visions begotten

on nature’s easel

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Tonight’s complete

tomorrow

starts once

more

*

Those two stanzas were great and so graceful. Great job and best of luck in your writing future.
- freespirit51
  May 6, 2007
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  Thanks Trueheart for your inspiring words. I am glad you enjoyed it as much as I did.
Anne Marie
May 6, 2007

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This was a realyl beautiful piece. The words painted pictures in my mind.
My favourite lines were:
"Pink and purple hues
shine through impending twilight
glorious is nature’s night
each sunset unique"

Good job, keep on writing

Anne-Marie
- freespirit51
  May 6, 2007
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  Thanks Anne for your wonderful comment. I am glad you enjoyed it. I enjoyed the challenge of writing it as well.
zeeeno
May 6, 2007

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wonderful
have you ever heard of the phrase "painting with words"? great job
- freespirit51
  May 6, 2007
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  thanks sio much for your wonderful words. I am glad you enjoyed it. I enjoyed writing it as well.
storiesuntold
May 6, 2007
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Beautiful
I love sunsets and yes each has its on way of coloring the days end .
- freespirit51
  May 6, 2007
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  Thanks so much for your kind comment. I enjoyed writing it as well.
sassylilpoet
May 6, 2007
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Great style, loved it
- freespirit51
  May 6, 2007
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  Thanks sassy glad you liked it.
OurxBeginning
May 6, 2007

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Wow, this is simply beautiful. I loved it, the imagery just..really stayed within my mind. Sunsets are so beautiful, nature itself is like magic. I truly enjoyed this, and the picture fit perfectly too. Great piece and good luck to you. ~ ~
- freespirit51
  May 6, 2007
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  Thanks Miraculous for your kind words. I am glad you enjoyed the piece. I love new challenges.
jacieluves 20you
May 5, 2007
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wow that is a great one to