In the darkness of the night
Under the light of the moon
You found me sitting alone
Watching the midnight sky
And the stars shining above
Within myself, crying hard
I'm thinking about those days
Where I had a carefree life
Hanging out in the beach
With all my school friends
The same ones that now scorn me
That hurts like a knife wound
My heart is dying and somehow
Inside me, there is nothing
No pain, no feelings at all
The river of life that flowed
Giving energy to keep me moving
Has been dammed, stopped for good
It's cold outside, I can hear
The whispers of the wind
And the gossips of those I
Had called my best friends
I have been forgotten forever
To die abandoned in this world
Or so I thought anyway
You found me sitting in the sand
I could hear your footsteps
But I thought you were Death
Coming to take me from this
Place of cruelty and sadness
I really thought death would
Be better than a life of lonliness
But you sat down next to me
And held me throughout the night
Being all the support I needed
In effect, saving my life
Author notes
Option 1: How to Save a Life
Option 2: "I can't seem to feel inside"
"The grass is greener on the other side"
Option 3: http://www.neurotherapyclinic.com/depression.jpg
http://imagecache2.allposters.com/images/pic/ISI/BC012~Best-Friends-Posters.jpg
Option 4: depression, friends (the backstabbing kind)
Option 5: wordbank
Hope you like it!
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Comments
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It ony takes one breath of fresh air for yo to want to start breathing again. Good write.
Good luck in the contest -
This too is powerful.
This is very powerful and shows what a simple act of kindness and compassion can do for people. I truly found a lot of merit in this. I have to say that I agree this is brilliant. -
wow this was brilliant and u used every option your the only one to have used a thing from each option but in surpose they can all tie into each other.
the poem was amazing and each line pulled me in,
u could fill al the emotions in it
i particulay loved these lines
"Being all the support I needed
In effect, saving my life "
they seemed to draw me in particul
the poem was mazing thnx and good luck
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Good job sis., I really like this poem. Very well written. I don't think death would've been better. I'm here sitting by your side. Love ya!
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