I want you to say my name, yell it outloud
I need to know that someone like you needs me
more or less, I think you know this feeling
it's preserved for a less common form of 'cliché'
To love, or be loved, which option do you want?
99.9% of the human race want the second one
but who can blame them? It's all a rat race
common grounds express nothing but vivid images
of cliché
oh but the books are calling for knowledge
for they are not written in a proper manner
the six year olds all gave up, after the second page
and the books were left to be finished, by novelists
but the sun and the moon go after time to show themselves
it's all just chance, they were playing 'tag' you're it.
soon one of them will fall and scrape their knees
but we won't be ready, because the novelists portaited everything wrong
They think the universe is about being serious,
down to earth.
''That's the stupidest thing I've ever heard,''
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I like the random feel of this piece. It reminds me of myself with too much energy and just pacing and talking LOL Good one.
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I like this. I just like the direction it's coming from. Almost from lots of different directions. Humourous in some parts, serious and intense in others, I can understand your P.O.V very well on this and these are some questions and thoughts we really should keep in our mind a little more.
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I could swear I have already commented on this one? I know i read it, so I am sure I commented too. Maybe its AP doing its same old tricks. This is a great write.
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I agree
They think the universe is about being serious,
down to earth.
''That's the stupidest thing I've ever heard,''
I work in retail. I'm on the slow track. I am quite capable of being promoted, being serious and putting the smack down if neccessary. I choose not to though. The people I work with have it hard enough getting by on retail wages and do a pretty good job. Why should I try to squeeze every last drop of their sweat working to increase the amount given to the share holders? To management I say(but not outloud as I do need my jo relax a little and you get what you pay for. You have to spend money to make money. This holds me back because I refuse to criticize people for doing their best even if their best work does not meet somes expectations.
Laughter is great for the body, spirit and mind. So is liquor when taken in moderation. Enjoy life. I do what I do so I can do what I want to do.
In case you did not notice I enjoyed the message you are sending with this piece. Share it with many people.
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This is a fantastic poem, I really enjoyed your thoughts and words. If life is a rat race, I hope there is some good cheese we are chasing after.
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