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Moon Dancer

MOON  DANCER

A  prose  poem  by

ROBERT  DAVIDSON


Tonight  I  walk  the  beach  to  the  stone  jetty  where  my  boat  is  moored. Moonlight  caressing  waves  causes  a  quivering  pulsation  of  light  over  water.

Looking  out  over  the  curve  of  the  bay  I  see  the  moth-like  figure  of  a  girl  dancing  on  the  shore.  She  pirouettes,  advancing  retreating,  as  moonlit  waves  wash  shimmering  sand.  A  slight  wind  from  the  sea  blows  through  her  hair  moulding  her  dress  to  her  body.  Her  movements  captivate.

She  comes  up  to  me  and  all  woman  she  is.  Her  breasts  rise  and  fall  as  she  speaks  and  we  soon become  as  one  -  pressed  together  in  the  dance,  my  love-kiss  finding  her  mouth.  The  white  moon  at  full  inspires  emotion  and  for  a  night  she  becomes  my  passion  as  smooth  the  bare  flesh  I  feel  her  body  surrender.  She  cries  as  sensuality  washes  over  her  in  multiple  waves.  Her  breath  warm  in  my  ear.

This  is  where  I  belong,  spoke  my  heart.  But  many  are  the  moods  of  the  moon,  the  wind  having  risen  with  the  turn  of  the  tide.  And  as  a  moonbeam  glides  across  a  wave,  she  slips  from  me  saying,  I  never  said  forever.

My  heart  sinks  like  a  stone  flung  into  a  deep  pool.  She  drifts  away  from  me,  a  withered  leaf  on  the  edge  of  a  storm.  My  passion  shipwrecked,  my  voice  -  a  drowning  sailor’s  call.

Copyright  2006  http://www.robertdavidson.blogsource.com

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  • nevadapoet
    October 23, 2008
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    A great write, but not a match for the pic. prompt


  • Sandygram silver member
    October 8, 2008

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    Lovely Words

    You write prose very well. This was so lovely. The imagery told a beautiful story. A delight to read this afternoon. Take care.

    Sandy
    l.


  • silverscent gold member
    October 3, 2008

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    This is beautiful. Your descriptions and the emotions you portrayed were just breath taking. I don't read many writes in the form you've used, but I might just have to start. I enjoyed this thoroughly. Thanks for entering.


  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    September 29, 2008
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    Thank you for your most beautifully sensual entry, good luck in my contest, Josie


  • SignifyingNothing
    October 24, 2007

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    Excellent. Beautiful. You made me actually see what was happening. This may be one of the best poems I've ever read on allpoetry. This was very powerful and the images were amazing.


  • weebabycole
    October 12, 2007
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    wow

    this poems amazing!!


  • WishMeAway--x
    September 26, 2007

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    she slips from me saying, I never said forever.


    i absolutely love those lines cause im there right now. and it hurts, but he said it.
    finalist for sure.

    ♥lovelove.


  • Glasyalabolas
    September 24, 2007
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    This is a wonderfully realized story, sensual and sad.

    Good write and congrats on gold.


  • FlipperSwitch
    August 25, 2007

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    The descriptions and romance are very inspiring; I enjoyed the form you wrote this in- poetry as a story write. Thank you for the read!


  • love.elizabeth
    August 25, 2007

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    " as a moonbeam glides across a wave, she slips from me saying, I never said forever."

    I never said forever- What a line!

    I really enjoyed reading this.
    Finalist.

    x


  • Sally the Ragdoll
    August 25, 2007

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    Aww, I love this poem! It's so sweet, yet at the same time, so sad, and the imagery is wonderful.
    Keep up the good work, and good luck in the contest!

    -Sally


  • azlyn gold member
    July 27, 2007
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    This is soooo nice! loved it!
    Blessings,
    Azlyn


  • delightfulmess silver member
    July 25, 2007

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    Very well written but sad. I was looking for uplifting sensual fantasies. This was still amazing I hope you do well in all the other contest.


    Delila

  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    July 25, 2007

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    This is just beautifully written, and I feel through your exquisite words that you are also a romantic just like myself, this is a very beautiful piece, looking forward to reading more of you, Josephine


  • Sinfully Yours
    July 11, 2007

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    oh man! i love this! great job! its more poetic than most poems i read and its got great description! great job and good luck!


  • animated lies
    June 28, 2007

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    Beautiful. Tales about the sea always seem to appeal to me in such a delicate way. Wonderful, heartwrenching imagery. Thank you for entering my contest.

    ♥ animated


  • Honesty Abounds
    June 28, 2007
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    Very Sensual

    Exquisitely penned...short story in a poem...thank you for entering and much luck to you my friend.


  • Dreamer With Dreams silver member
    May 28, 2007
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    Beautiful write! I wanted so much more! You should write a book based on this short story. I would buy it in a second. I'm begging for more. I was devistated when it came to an end. Amazing write. Good luck in the contest!

    Safely hidden in the darkness,

    ~ The Rocker who lost all


  • SugarCandyKittyKat
    May 15, 2007
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    Fantastic!!!

    Such a sweet relief of the soul!!!

    Deep piece...


  • Last Pixie
    May 11, 2007
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    o how sad! wonderfully soothing. definately. it just flows so well. nice. very nice!!!!


  • Dalaney gold member
    May 6, 2007
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    What an enchanting piece of prose...
    I fell in love with this - I live on
    an island, and I love walking the beach,
    sailing in my boat, watching the moon
    fade in and out of clouds above the
    ocean...You've moved me with this write,
    Poet.

    Love, Lane

  • Tablet Of Essence
    May 5, 2007

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    Through your words flows such as is the ways of the heart, whether they be good or not. Each see's something different as good of course but in the same in the end, for it may bring out the same out come. As long as it gets the message across I guess is the needed thing.Words what a world in it's self. Such beauty with just a shape of a pen or in thie case a mouse. What I read in your words is alot of hard work, which I am sure you know that. I got alot of good out of this write. and I would like to thank you so much for posting it in my contest.

    Forever;
    Etching Letters

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