You know when you speak with yourself
what happens then, you are turned into a second person
while you are a first person
I mean you are a single and then you are turned
into double in figure
you cross-examine with a question from you
and you know you receive an answer from yourself only
how it comes to pass, have you ever speculated?
If you dig up this theme you assimilate a hint
well I know ,what this hint is, I partake this hint with you
well you know I am subsisting in this creation
since my birth and this creation was already in operation
before the arrival of mine
some title was backside in this operation
some command was posterior to my sprout as well
and that control is the factor in me
when I contemplate something then that HE responses to me
In this way I am only one who cross-examine
the counter-reply converges from the consciousness of mine
which is an amplifier of that unknown faculty
you and me tag that credential as God, you know
Author notes
PIc 2 ... Contemplation by mrcool256 (deviant art)
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Hah hah brilliant ..very well written and very clever too, cryptic and obvious at the same time ..well done
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An interesting read, I will continue to ponder it. Thanks for read.
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It took me a very long time to comment on this wonderful poem...but as I reread it, I (finally)grasp the meaning..."an amplifier of that unknown faculty, you and me tag that credential as God..."...this is the heart of it. Our 'awareness' of unknowable things is our connection to this 'unknown faculty'...we become amplifiers/receivers of His precursory presence and response to our queries...the language use here is phenomenal...words I wouldn't ordinarily expect to be placed together, "some command was posterior to my sprout", and "counter-reply converges"...such rich and flavorful word choices here...I always enjoy 'chewing' on them for a time...to be sure I've not missed a single nuance...great write here...Peace, Rhonda
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a good piece, ah what if if you start talking to yourself and a load of voices start crashing about in your head! well I know , - comma in a spacesuit there
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INDEED AN INTERESTING PIECE. Leaves alot for the reader to ponder over as well. It shows alot of deep thoughts in yourself as well. Nice to see people still can refer to HIM without asking for something or blaming him for something. great piece.
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Nicely said. It is good when the thoughts that consume us are our thoughts about God, but better than our chatty minds is the FEELING of God in our hearts. Love Tara. Ha ha! What a nice happy poem.
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you'd get on well with the Catalans, they enjoy a bit of scatology as well
"some title was backside in this operation
some command was posterior to my sprout as well"
very playful -
It was very interesting to read. It was new and very refreshing.
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