Lovers tangled in eachothers arms
And lusting in the summer heat
Plagued by his constant begging
Ignorance at its best
Complying finally
Fearing he'd leave
All I have
Left is
Regret
Author notes
hopelessxromantic
Style: Nonet
A nonet has nine lines. The first line has nine syllables, the second line eight syllables, the third line seven syllables, etc... until line nine that finishes withone syllable. It can be on any subject and rhyming is optional.
(I did the syllable count for most of the words by how you say them so if the count seems a little off in some places thats probably why)
A contest entry
- Round Wonders: #4 by in-the-twilight.
600 points, ended May 7, 2007, 4 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - biggest contest in allpoetry history! (i hope) need 1,000 entries!! by Gasp.
1300 points, ended July 11, 2007, 638 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - *Rounds Contest :R1-Form* by Carpe Noctem.
450 points, ended December 11, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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very nice work. You are truly a perfectionist. Poetry fits your method well.
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You really did deserve that trophy. It was short but great. I hope that really didn't happen but if it did, don't regret it just live and learn.
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I really liked it, and congrats for getting that trophie, and this oem is plenty good. wonederfullyt penned.
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Wow!
1st off congrats on placing 3rd place in my daughter's contest. This s a verywell penned poem and I love how deep it is and how very well penned all round it is. a most ingenius poem that richly deserved that6 beautiful bronze poem. excellent work and keep up the good work. Signed, Tiger
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a very good nonet, i like the story you tell through your words, and your language is great. congratulations on your vronxe; well deserved
lucy
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very good, the form should have been followed more strictly (couldnt catch all the syllable counts in rythhm or IC), but overall a very touching poem!
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this is good but shouldn't there be a space between each other. I loved the write it was very touching.
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It may be short...
Though it is short, it's still a very well written piece. Words chosen perfectly to describe how you were feeling. Keep it up.
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this is a good write. Keep up the good work.
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*cries* i like the poem, subject matter is moving tho.. i think it flows great and is fine, but i dont critque well, i just look at what people write about. nice work
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This is good... but the last line has 2 syllables not one... and the fifth line has 6 syllables not 5... so that cost you a few points... but not bad at all. Here's your score:
Title: 9/10
Followed Form: 35/45 (syllable mistakes... no big)
Creativity: 17/20
Metaphor: 15/20 (could've been stronger)
Followed Rules: 5/5
Total: 76/100
Very nice job! Rock on! xoxo Meg -
In the first line, there should be a space between each and others. This is a nice summeer poem, it reminds me of my boyfriend and I. The summer that we never want to end and once they do it's like summer just started and then all the things we wish we did are just left undone. But nice write, keep it up. Oh and goodluck in life
Autumn
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