Your life is like a fragrant flower
making the ambience fragrant and vibrant
the flower that is brimming with nectar
giving every drop to the bees that hover
the flower that has petals of many colours
and yet it is one, 'ONE FLOWER'
May I wish the flower stays fresh for ever------
For ever.....
For ever.......
Hemantsharma
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A contest entry
- Maa's Birthday by jean-marc.
525 points, ended May 11, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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stopping by again after a long time to recherish this poetic offering ...
thank you,
maa
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maa
Revered maa
My student, Dr. Abhijay Karandikar M.D. (Medicine) suggested some better change and subseqquently edited this poem
I liked the suggestion. so I edited the poem on AP. I think you will also like the suggestion
Please read and reply
Hemant
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I am just returning to this very touching poem for which I wish to thank you from my heart ... I am humbled and moved by your words of kindness ...
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what a wonderful poem, so generous and heartfelt ... I love your comparison with a flower that has many petals yet is ONE flower ... I see that we both adhere to the same truth ... I feel that this metaphor is very suitable and delightful, especially the idea about the many different colors of the petals ...
thank you so much for this kind and generous offering and for your wishes as well that the flower may stay fresh forever ... well, the physical flower may fall to dust, but its essence will not suffer from it ...
maa
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maa
Revered maa
There were some comments on this metaphor, but not a word from you! That was disturbing. May be you were busy in celebrations. As expected came a touching comment from your pen. I literally wrote this poem in thre minutes. Hence i thought it was inadequate, you did not like, hence ignored it. with your words I attained satiety.
Hemantsharma
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This is a beautiful metaphor for Marion! You show her loveliness and generosity with affection.
This is sweet and a delightful gift to her.
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Margaret G
Thank you for the appreciation
Hemant
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So lovely.
There is a lot of wisdom and love in this birthday poem. You certainly know how to phrase a piece to make the reader feel its effects.
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Country Cousin
Thanks for appreciation
I wrote tihs poem in 3 minutes. There was a spelling mistake (hower, correct:hover)I corrected now
Hemant
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What a beautiful poem for Maa, Hemant. She's such a lovely person, inside and out and I know she's going to love this special poem for her. You've depicted her very well, just as she is at heart
I wish you the best in the contest, my friend
Mom Dee
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Catz
Dear mom
maa indeed is akin to a flower inside and out. I wrote this poem in 3 minutes. There remained a spelling mistake which I corrected now (hower>hover)
Hemant
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freshness
thank you, dear friend, for filling this contest with the freshness of the grace and the scent of purity.
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Aw this is sweet. An innocent touch of love. This could be interpreted as a little child or a girlfriend. Either way I love how you put this all together, goodluck in life
Autumn
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Autumn
Neither a little child, nor a girlfriend.
Revered maa is my pen friend, a spiritual friend.
I have expressed an immense respect for her
Dr.Hemant Vinze
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