Ghostly figures Dance
Going through the park one night with Pete
Hands entwined we sat down on a seat
Our eyes we thought were playing tricks you see
Spirits appeared floating near the tree
They seemed as though they danced 'round the grass
Lilting laughter filled the air that night
Yet though they seemed happy I knew their plight.
For tales of a hall once stood upon this ground
I heard a man was fraught and made no sound
Gaze was upon his girl who danced with another
Until he chose to shoot and make them suffer
Raising his arm he shot the pair in rage
Everyone began to cause a rampage
Shots were fired as they tried to flee the hall
Down they went as panic made them fall
And lives were lost that fateful night in June
Next he raised the gun to his head and soon
Ceased to live. The hall now gone they come
Each year to dance as ghosts they have become.
Jenelda White May 5, 2007
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A contest entry
- FOR HUGH WYLES FAVOURITE’S GROUP ONLY # 11 by huguenauties.
800 points, ended May 12, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Delightful
I like really good rhyming poetry LIKE THIS.
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Nice Acrostic Jen
This is a really nice acrostic jen well done and all the best in this contest
Hugs
Jan
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wow, what a great acrostic...and a chiller to be sure.
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Thankyou Carol,
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amazing photo!
And such a tragic tale of passion and death. It has happened, and one hopes it will not happen again.
Best of luck!
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Thanks Margaret, I loved the picture when I found it.
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excellent~
I am like Mauree you did this so well I didn't even realize it was an Acrostic...
Eerie and all too spooky but I love things like this
I just entered too do hope ya come give me a read too
Best of luck in the contest.....
Hugs
Susan~~~
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Thanks Susan and I'm catching up to all the entrants in the contest now, so I'll be by shortly. The star thingy is playing up at the moment and won't let me give them to you.
Love Jen.
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Your acrostic was so well done I didn't realize it was one!
Good Luck in the contest! (Hope I don't have a nightmare tonight!)
♥ Maureen
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Geeze Maureen I hope you didn't have nightmares either.
The star thingy is playing up at the moment and won't let me give them to you.
Love Jen.
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Guess what? I got the five stars and was able to give them to you. YAY!
Things are lookin' up again!
Love,
Maureen
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If I ever see a ghost I'll never go out at night and will sleep with the light on...I'll also become and alcoholic.
A cool acrostic, no, a creepy acrostic. It sounds all too real with events now happening in my country.
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Ghost's can't hurt you Yem, it's only the living that can do that. So never fear them.Yes I read about that, it happens everywhere.The star thingy is playing up at the moment and won't let me give them to you.
Jen.
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Dear Jen, OOOH this is spooky and what a tragedy to happen. It shows you what jealousy can do to a person.
Good write cuz
Hine
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A sad story, Jen... such atrocities, those caused by jealousy.
You've told the story very well, good job
I wish you the best in the contest
Dee
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AP won't let me give you stars.
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Dear Jen,
Oh how sad that this man was so jealous he had to cause so much destruction. A very sad ghostly story.
Thankyou for entering our group contest and good luck.
A/J
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Dear Jenelda,
In view of the recent campus shootings and the terrible shootings of children and teachers in schools, this poem really strikes home with it's message of jealousy and revenge.
Will man ever learn to curb and master his baser instincts? Be careful who you dance with.
A well-written story. Good luck in the contest.
Love and hugs, XXX Hugh R.
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