"PAIN WITHOUT LOVE!"
The speakers blare.
It booms in my chest but...
I'm too drunk to care.
At the end of my bed
And the end of my rope.
To the bottom of my bottle,
Done the last of my dope.
"Do not operate heavy machinery."
Does a car count as such?
Not that I care cause under
The influence it's a rush.
The car stereo on,
I heed the song's call:
"CAUSE I'D RATHER FEEL PAIN
THAN NOTHING AT ALL!"
Lyrics that haunt, that
Shiver my spine,
Daring me to go there.
To cross over the line.
Pedal to the metal-
"YOU'RE SICK OF FEELIN' NUMB!"
Red line each grinding gear,
Ready to do something dumb.
Each memory of your smile,
Poison in my veins.
Coursing towards my heart,
Feeling every strain.
First the adrenaline,
Now comes the pain.
Crippling my soul
Doing a buck-eighty in the rain.
The train's whistle goes unheard under-
"WHEN THE LIGHTS GO OUT YOU'LL UNDERSTAND!"
Lights fill the car,
I raise up my hand.
Clash of metal grind,
The lights do go out.
Destroyed by the memories I
Wanted to forget about....
Author notes
Number two please.
Btw if you don't know what a buck-eighty is, it's 180 miles per hour. buck=100 + 80. Racing term.
A contest entry
- Empty and Pain-filled by Fallen Grace.
500 points, ended May 15, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - {[ Slipping Emotion]}- one day left for perfection by Menace.
600 points, ended August 26, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Contest: Three Days Grace by Never Fall in Love.
600 points, ended September 30, 2007, 17 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I had to come back and comment this
THREE DAYS GRACE ROCK!
I can relate to this on a level I never even knew possible.
I've driven somewhere under the influence, ...scary stuff!
I'ma have to read some more of your work!
well done, definately deserving of the gold!
♥ Unity
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I love it ! !
This is an amazing write. Congrats on the gold trophy, very deserving. My heart was in my throat anticipating what was to come...fantastic imagery.
'crippling my soul'...very powerful, very emotive.
So glad I had a look. Can't wait to see some more of your work.
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My sons friend was beheaded driving while under
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Thank you. Sorry about your son's friend.
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kl lol
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wow i like how you put three days grace into the poem very well written and very interesting on how you write
i like it no wait i love it!!!!! keep up the excellent work my friend
Stevie
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This really is amazing. I love it.
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Wow!
This is a quite different interpretation of the song. Good storyline with excellent imagery. Thank you and good luck.
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I like
Very well put together,luv the song,luv the write!"daring me to go there",and "doing a buck 80" are my fave-lines...Good work once again!!! -
Wow, this is really great. I don't really know what else to say! It's perfect.
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this was wow i can put to words how incredible this is. i love the song u chose. three days grace has a way of makeing music relateble. the way this flowed was perfect. the way the poem played out was amazing, im glade i found this in your stuff
amazing job
jess
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Fantastic!
This is one of my very, very favorites of yours and I love this song too!!!!Three days grace rocks. I love you and this is great poetry.
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Ah! So touching!! At least, to me, 'cause I completely know this feeling. It hasn't killed me, obviously, but it's given me more memories I wish were never made... Anyway. My favorite two lines are "Each memory of your smile, Poison in my veins." Gosh I know that feeling all too well! What inspired this? Great job. Thanks for sharing. Take care.
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Kinda scary. I liked the rhyming of it very good. The last line said it all "Destroyed by memories I wanted to forget about"
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AWESOME
This is the most awesome peom i have read on this site!
~Audri
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painful indeed. And the title is that of my past contest I held. Nicely done. You have talent. Goodluck in the contest.
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By reading this write
I assume that the song you were listening to
At that particular moment
has affected the verses
throughout the poem
lol, it's really good
It had a slightly different tone from what I normally read
But it flowed well
I liked the ending .. it's perfect to match the title
anywayz
good luck to you
NeveR ♥
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Three Days Grace, right?
Anyways, This is a great poem, strong words and great rhyms.
"Each memory of your smile,
Poison in my veins.
Coursing towards my heart,
Feeling every strain."
Great poem and Thank you for entering my contest. Good luck!
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wow =] by far my favorite! you make people feel your emotions in your writing. i like it job well done!
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Whoa.Song inspired much?Anyways...Very good.Could kinda feel the pain
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